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Reviews for The Path of Sacrifice 2: Angel's Hunt

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From ANON - Little t on December 01, 2016
I just found your stories and I love them! Please update this one

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From ANON - Shib on September 21, 2010
Please please please update soon. It looks like you haven't updated in a couple months and I'm almost finished with all of your stories!

And you left it with a Cliffy!!!

I'd also like to request a lemon with Anarchy, just because I want to see how a sex scene with an ancient dragon would turn out. The mating rituals of ancient flying creatures has got to be an exquisite sight to see, and since in the Pokemon world I doubt there is any information on particulars of those rituals, so you would get to make them up completely from scratch! Haha. I think it would be quite a challenge.

Peace.
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From aragdoll on May 22, 2010
Angel has gotten mighty assertive, hasn't she?
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From gardevoirfan on April 11, 2010
Most interesting chapter. A heartfelt moment with Moonlight, and then casually she gets this vestibule thought that she could very easily replace him. Then there's Gary who seems to want some one-on-one time with Angel. Hm... this could be interesting.

The girl showing up and then handing over her Pokemon for covering her own behind made this update a rather dark chapter actually. But, ending it with Angel releasing Amelio from his Pokeball could very well awaken an interesting scenario for everyone.

Finally, we have the 4 Executives of Team Rocket debating on who gets what power, which could very well be the downfall of Team Rocket, and the beginning of the darkest chapter in all the regions of Pokemon. This could very well take a turn for the worst, if Angel, and Gary don't do something.

Then I can't help but conjure up the mildly naughty thought of what the blonde haired teeny blonde 'did' with the Lucario, now that she has her own Houndoom. O_o (I blame dirty college humor for those thoughts.) But in a sense, that's kind of saddening that she's "replaced," him with Houndoom just because he might be more endowed. :^(

Well, hopefully Angel will treat him with more respect. ^_^

I did review your last update, but I can understand if it wasn't really worth commenting on since your chapter was more for the 'thrills and chills,' that time. ;^)

Please keep up the good work, Angel.

~Silentwriter
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From aragdoll on April 11, 2010
Wow, that Lucario is a good pickup. Going to add a lot of physical muscle to her team.

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From gardevoirfan on January 19, 2010
*shudders* The lemony scenes are pretty detailed, yet the scene is so "dark," the way it's put into the back of Pokecenter's basement parts. I did enjoy the fact you avoided using common terms to describe certain "aspects" of the characters, very creative on your part. I can't believe I found myself actually being "turned-on," by reading. Freaky, yet the magic of words and how they're strung together in combination of imagination, tend to have an affect on the readers' mind. Lol, at your response to my reviews, I'm not a prof. but after doing some read throughs of some fanfics. and with the amount of creative writing I've learned, I tend to know a trick or two of how the authors get the readers' attention and keep it.

Thoughts:

So you've got a meeting coming up with Gary and some trustworthy rockets, in the Pokecenter, with Angel. You've got a complication with Umbreon still tainted with some kind of evil, that started with Darkrai, and was sort of spread to Angel. You've got a guardian angel who has a neutral standing on emotions and prefers logic over emotion. I did find it slightly comical about how he was lecturing Angel about her human habit, and how he shook his head in lack of understanding how the humans can let their sex cravings cloud their mind. I did notice, reading b/w the lines, about the "hidden offer," made by Mewtwo, though whether it was intentional on his part or yours, I'm not sure, but it caused me to snicker a bit on how that could be interpreted as, (forgive me, I've had too many erotic friends, so they've sort of rubbed off on me, but I still keep my gentlemanly quality standing strong. ^_^)

I do hope you continue this rather descriptive tail, and I look forward to reading your fic. in the future. Thanks for keeping it updated. ;^)

And your welcome for the ratings and long reviews.

~silentwriter~
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From ANON - Kiki on January 09, 2010
Oh mai gawd. I love your series. Keep it uuuup!!! Missing lack of updates though :(
You gonna continue this, or leave it as is? D:
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From gardevoirfan on November 29, 2009
Gah! It was cut too short! Dangite! :( Well, this chapter did provide some possible events that could happen towards the future. Thanks for giving me something new to read. ^_^

"Gunning," huh? I wasn't sure what the name suggested, but I guess if I read more later, it'll come to me a little more clearly. I like the mixed feelings Gary's feeling. He'll be the one to keep Angel on track of the pure, or he'll be the one to totally to push her off the track, whichever happens.

Pretty good altogether, thus far.

~silent writer~
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From gardevoirfan on November 27, 2009
I recently finished through your Part 1 of Path of Sacrifice and now I'm caught up to date with your current fic.: The Path of Sacrifice 2.

As I've stated in the concluding review of the first story, I'm greatly impressed by how well this is pieced together. The story started off a little sketchy at first and made me have my doubts, but your fic is the first one that actually seems to be updated the most frequently w/i a reasonable amount of time.

I like the how strong the relationship b/w Gary and Angel is thickening as the story progresses, and the fact you're keeping every detail that's been described into play. Again, I'm eager to see how the slight "love triangle" conflict will play out as your story progresses b/w Angel, Gary and Amaron (Mewtwo). Again, apologies for messing up the spelling of his nickname. ^.-

The first four chapters certainly have opened up for a whole "new ball game," to take place. I do encourage you to continue finishing this up, because thrice I've been disappointed by the past authors of poke tails (Namely Luca, Sinners, Project Crucifix) all for the same reason, they've yet to finish their tales on them and they all left me at a HUGE cliff hanger from all the excitement, and drama they've shown. Granted, some of their details were so overwhelming and indescribable, that they would actually having me craving to see what would happen next, it's sad to say that they've yet to respond for some time now and apparently, based on some of the events prior to mine, it's been a while since they've been even looked at. Your's is actually surpassing there's by the simple fact that you've kept some sort of updates that are what one may call more consistent.

Now, I'm not knocking any of their fics, because if they were to finish them, I'd be reading and possibly rereading in a heartbeat to see them all pieced together into one glamorous puzzle. ^_^

So in short, I'm pleased to say, you've been moved to rank 1 in the four fics. I've read thus far.

One minor 'oof' moment I had was when you typed the rage Angel had with the Kanto gym leaders being kidnapped, and the possibility of the Johto Gym leaders being next, you actually flip-flopped them around and it caused me to double-take and reread what you had. I understood what you meant, but in case you go back and edit, that's something that happened either in Chapter 3 or 4, I don't remember exactly.

In the long run: 2 thumbs way WAY up for a well crafted story. I can't say your the first author to inspire me to continue my fic. I started long ago and intend to finish it, but I can say you've certainly aided in my 'want' to do so, though I'm only doing so out of personal time that I feel the mood to write. College and searching for a part-time job come first, then family/friends, and then possibly personal projects, but similar to you, it's not always easy to acquire such time to do such a task.

Thanks for gracing me and several other readers with such greatness! ^_^

~silent writer~

P.S. In case no one mentioned it: Congrats on your marriage and your 3-year-old. Bet life gets pretty interesting with a family being raised.

Can't say I'll be able to stay on top of reading your fics, but if I get the occasional chance, I'll try to buzz in and read through so I can stay up to date with your fics. Hope you enjoy comments/criticism from a new fan!
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From aragdoll on November 11, 2009
Pff, letting a little thing like marriage get in the way of writing fanfiction - for shame!

It's good to have you around again :P
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From RichardH on November 04, 2009
short but sweet... I like it.

however I would love to see what angel has planned... as long as she doesn't blow up another building
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From ANON - PsychoWardJester on July 06, 2009
Hmmm, not bad so far...I was worried a bit in part 1 because the writing seemed to be degrading. I'm glad it is picking up!

Oh Rocket and your staged terrorism...crazy kids...
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From ANON - Mizuru007 on June 23, 2009
OH SHET. So much action! :0
I've gotta wonder where you get these plot...THINGS from. Is it all IN YOUR MIIIIND, or are you influenced by something?
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From ANON - mizuru007 on June 15, 2009
AWWWWWWW TODDLER. Take your time, then~ :D

Why was there BOOM? THIS DID NOT HAPPEN IN THE GAME MY BRAIN'S EXPLOOODING.
...I jest.
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From ironclad103 on June 15, 2009
Hi,
I haven't reviewed a story on here before and actually had to make an account to do so. I really like how you brought up the Catch 22 starting Pokemon problem. It is also neat how you incorporated not only an original character but other characters from the game/anime as well.

the only problem i have is being able to follow who is doing the talking. If i may be so bold as to suggest using the tag lines "Said angel" or "Replied Gary" I know a lot of people see these and think "I know who is talking, I'm not stupid!" But in actuality they are there for good reason. If you wanted to go all out you could even format the story like books do and start a new paragraph each time someone new speaks. But i know that your writing this for fun so format need not apply

other than that cool story could use more romance but i can understand how it would be hard to fit that in when they main characters are in a big rush.
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