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By : hsaotome

From ANON - thtiger on July 12, 2009
I know it's not suppose to be funny, but I laughed. Ranma screwed up so badly with the Libido point. Looks like it's much more effective when used on a girl. I'd be surprised if he could get it up again in a day.

Ryouga's split personality was an interesting take. I'm assuming that it's the result of Happosai not completly removing the pressure points he used on him.

Ukyou's attitude foreshadows a different sort of experience for Akane in the future.
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From ANON - Pariah on July 12, 2009
Ah, split personality! I like it.

It takes the accountability away from Ryouga for rape while still making him a rapist at the same time. Essentially making him out of character without making him out of character...Or are you implying that he's still under the influence of the moxibustion? Either way, the more he maintains the perception that "Haido" exists, the stronger the personality becomes. That's one of the more interesting points that Stevenson's book made.

If Ranma ends up in the same situation as Akane somehow, it'd be cool if it were "Haido" who kept her in it (I'm not sure why; possibly 'cuz he's my favorite character). Haido's devious personality might even see fit to ransom the moxibustion for Ranma's half-cure--and sexual favors of course.

I wonder how this personality would feel towards the new Akane. Would the lusty womanizing "Haido" find her more appealing than usual or would Ryouga's righteous fury over Akane's situation--as well as his basic attachment to her--be able to override whatever urges he has towards her?

As for Ranma's problem: don't cure it any time soon. I'm having too much fun with a resentful Akane dreaming about being nailed by Hikaru and Hiroshi while Ranma pathetically masturbates to the scene--while he's in the same bed with her! That was just so cool.
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From Scorpinac on July 11, 2009
>>To Scorpinac. Do you really think I'll let it be that easy?>>

No, but I kinda hoped... At least I was right about the mutual confessions, and almost about the make-up sex. Like Akane said, next time. As long as Ryoga gets here soon so Ranma can get the piece and he and Akane can work on curing themselves(I'll admit I'd sort of forgotten about the photos, doh!). Well, until chapter 14, then. Laters.
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From ANON - Pariah on July 11, 2009
Akane is falling deeper and deeper into Hikaru's trap. So Awesome.

I especially liked how she compared Hikaru's virility to Ranma's problem with premature ejaculation.

I have a feeling you're already going in this direction, but might I suggest that Ranma spies on Akane during one of her sessions? That would be a pretty serious mindfuck--especially if Hikaru decides to make good on Akane's non-promise to let him screw her in her own room. Ranma would, more than likely, catch that session while in hiding. Suppose Akane knew that he was watching and Hikaru decided to have Akane talk shit about Ranma's sexual prowess while he skewered her. That would definitely test the boundaries of their love to be sure. On some level, she might see it as a way of taking out her frustrations on Ranma for his poor performance.
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From ANON - thtiger on July 10, 2009
My boyfriends back, and there's going to be trouble.

Or maybe not. I'm still thinking that a full strength Ranma could disuade them. One picture goes public, Akane is ruined, and I don't have anything to live for. So you won't. Live that is. Does not matter if he would really commit murder, just that they think he would.

Ironically their greatest protection is Akane's fear. And part of me wonders if in the back of her mind there is the little thought that if she's rescued she won't have the sex anymore. Maybe she's not aware of it, but I have to think, considering how much she enjoys the sex, if not the boys, that the only true way to rescue Akane is to give her an alternative that more palatable to her. Meaning Ranma's going to have to apply himself to becoming a sex monster. The male type that is.
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From ANON - thtiger on July 08, 2009
You know, it was right there in the chapter. Happosai stuck something in Ryouga's bag, and I never even wondered about it. Guess I was too busy focusing on Happosai not being sure if he'd removed all of the pressure points he put on Ryouga. I think that might be what clues Ranma in, when he realizes that Ryouga's libido pressure points, or some of them, are pressed. There must be some way a master can tell if a pressure point is active or not.

Even if it's not the full set of points, I wonder what effect it's had on Ryouga being active for all this time.

Pretty rough session at the doctors. I'm really hoping you plan on him getting some payback. I don't care if Akane is ever fully saved. She can go from abuser to abuser and that's fine. But I really want to see some of the scum that have been abusing her get some serious pay back. The Doctor heads the list.
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From ANON - Pariah on July 08, 2009
Connoisseur of cocks. Hehe.

Well, another barrier has been broken with prostitution. Who knows when she might rationalize any given situation so that she would whore herself out of her own volition. It's a stretch but not impossible.

The segment was great, but I was a little disappointed about the 500 Yen. Obviously she'd throw it away. If you'd given her the opportunity to have a more significant amount, she'd be tempted to keep it. Yamada would know that. And if, in the end, she decided to keep it, that would be self-perceived stain on her character forever--until she stops caring of course.

And, oh, that was very clever putting the symbol in Ryoga's pack. That gives you all the leg-room you need to pursue whatever story elements you wish without making it seem like you're belaboring the point of curing Ranma. I was afraid you were gonna end up having Ranma obtain the missing piece, but be forced to continue studying it to figure out how to get it working.

On a more marginal addendum: I liked how you quietly had Ranma admit that she was used to the taste of semen. Obviously she didn't praise the taste of Happosai's sperm, but apparently it wasn't bad either. It was a nice subtlety.

Great chapter.
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From Scorpinac on July 08, 2009
Well, at least all he, or should I say, they have to do is wait for Ryoga or P-Chan to come strolling back into town, providing he does, course even if he's actively trying to avoid Nerima because what happened between him and Ranma that might just cause him to walk right into the Dojo! Of course, it would help if Ranma could figure out the Happosai was responsible for that particular rape, if semi-unintentionally, since it doesn't sound like he ever actually copped to it, the bastard. I also imagine as soon as Ranma gets back he'll make a more or less full confession to Akane, leading her to do likewise despite Michio's warning, and after some mutual "punishment and possibly make-up sex Ranma will teach her the pressure points to protect herself with, and they'll wreck a sort of revenge while they wait for pig boy to get to them with the piece of paper(providing of course he didn't find it and throw it away like an idiot!). The real revenege, Michio, Yamada, and the other's painful demises, will be after that. Until next time, then. Laters.
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From ANON - John Olsen on July 05, 2009
Good chapter, I can see were you are going with Ranma (I think) the pressure points can really help him if he will stay with out strength, will need some needles or a cane to push them from distance or the ones behind muscles. Now if Happosai also train him to absorb ki from the women around him and can use it to get more strength or others kinds of attacks then he can become again a great fighter... besides being a True Heir of Happosai. hope to read more.

JO
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From ANON - Pariah on July 04, 2009
"Akane hoped it wouldn't ruin her appetite come dinner time."

Brilliant!

Masterful handling of the Hiroshi situation. In retrospect, my idea to actually have her consciously suggest more of her own cognizant volition would have been premature. Having her make the request under duress was much more sensible. Not to mention how she unconsciously instructed Hiroshi to be demanding of her. The way she asked him for it without actually asking was a nice touch.

The same for Ukyo as well. I was afraid that "revenge" meant death, jail, slavery, crippling, jusenkyo curse, etc.. The stuff you usually see in emotional rape fics. I guess I didn't give you enough credit to handle it the way you did. Sorry.

I'm not too disappointed about the librarian. As long as she got caught I'm happy. I just figured that since Kasumi was already aware of her growing amorousness, it would have been hilarious to spy on Akane and then file it away as a phase or something.
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From ANON - thtiger on July 04, 2009
Aww, I was looking forward to how you planned on bringing Ranma and Akane together. Well, tell the truth, I was mainly eager, and hoping, we'd get to see Ranma-chan and Akane being abused together. Now we have to read another chapter of Ranma and Akane training seperately. What a hardship.^_^

Big congratulations on having five thousand hits in less than one month.
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From ninesenshi on July 02, 2009
Pretty good chapter. I wonder if Happosai might have in mind to create a more literal heir to his school in addition to/instead of a spiritual one. A pregnant Ranma might also be stuck in girl form...
SailorNemesis
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From ANON - thtiger on July 01, 2009
Most interesting bit of plotting. Ryouga retains his good guy status, and still gets to hit all the bases with Ranma-chan. Too bad for him that Ranma has no idea of that.
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From ANON - Pariah on July 01, 2009
"This is soooo wrong!!"

I LOVED that.

You handled Ryoga's character splendidly. He was honest about both his hatred and his intent to undermine Ranma's romance with Akane even while having the capacity to comfort Ranma. He's open about being Ranma's enemy--or rival I guess--but he's still prepared do what he feels is right by Ranma. Usually, people just either write him as if he were mindlessly hateful or as if he were Ranma's best friend. But your depiction turned out well. An intervention by Happosai was definitely the best way to get a rape scene off the ground without belaboring the point of constructing a rationalized scenario that progressed Ryouga into a rapist mindset.

I'm mixed on how it seems you should handle a second encounter with Ryouga. I don't think he'd develop a taste for rape. It'd be too much of a jump in character. But it also wouldn't be interesting to read about how self-loathing he is over it. Assuming you want to involve him again in the future with Ranma, I think you should have Ranma find out it wasn't his fault either before or during the encounter. And since it sounds like Happosai's going to be training Ranma sexually as well as physically, knowing that Ryouga wasn't trying to take advantage of her might compel her to take out her sexual frustrations--that Happosai will have sewn--on Ryouga...not that he'd mind in the end.

Or, maybe, Ryouga's gonna see Akane again before Ranma. Ranma, after all, does have to spend a few weeks with Happosai first.

It would be absolutely awesome to have either Kasumi or Soun walk in on Akane while she's watching porn.

And I'm interested to see how you're going to handle Happosai's sex drive. Obviously, he's gonna use pressure points to sex Ranma up, but I wonder if he's going to have some kind of technique to make himself super endowed so it'll be all the harder for Ranma to fit his appendage down her throat.

Great chapter.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 29, 2009
Well, you certainly didn't waste any time. In coming back to the story after your break, or in getting Ranma-chan nailed. I found the Kuno section disturbing as hell in some ways. If you remove the fantasy elements, such as Ranma's gender switch, and the bondage, which I'm all for actually, it strikes way too close to home in a real world sort of way. They say that the majority of rape victims know their attacker, and that certainly applies to both Kuno and Ukyou. But it was the Kuno one that seemed very realistic. I'm sure a whole lot of date rape victims have faced someone with a mind set a lot like Kuno. So desperate for what he wants that he fools himself into thinking that she really wants it as well.

Ukyou's action was a whole lot more of a blow to Ranma than Kuno's I think. Not only did he trust her, unlike Kuno, but the assault was against his male side. He can always make excuses for what happened to his girl side as not being real, as it's not his natural form. No way to run away and hide from what Ukyou did.

Now Ukyou is not the fool Kuno is. I'm sure you've got it all planned out, but I can really see her feeling a lot of guilt once she'd had time to think. As for Ranma, his vow of vengence was very in keeping with the situation, but he's not the sort to keep his rage burning long term. Given a chance I'm sure he'd do terrible things to Ukyou in the short term. In the long term I have to wonder if he'll follow the path of a lot of real life victims and start to wonder if he had been at fault for what happened. For leading her on and not making a clean break with her.
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