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From ninesenshi on June 29, 2009
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Oh, concerning yuri. I personally love it, but if you don't that's cool. Just please for the love of all that's holy, NO YAOI!
If you delve into that, please give a clear warning at the chapter start.
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From ninesenshi on June 29, 2009
Well, more characters have appeared. I will start off by saying that I continue to like the Akane segments. They have certainly remained fresh for me. The introduction of Ranma and others has gone ok. Just be careful that you do not earn yourself the dread story code of OOC (out of character). I think you are treading a thin line with this one, especially with Ukyo. I understand that you are emphasizing the dark side of obsession...That being said, I mostly liked it. She was a bit foolish for leaving Ranma free to just run off. Good luck and keep writing.
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From ANON - Pariah on June 29, 2009
Wonderful. The part where she rolled out the red carpet for an ass-reaming painted an effectively erotic picture.

Feels good to know I was right about Hikaru's manipulation of Akane's perceptions on being a slut. Although, I'm not sure if his getting her to open up to him is a form of reverse psychology or gaining a monopoly. Is he really trying to inhibit Akane's desire to have sex often and anonymously so he can have her to himself or is his advice a trojan horse that only draws her deeper down that path? Or does his initial advice clash with his eventual intent; is his treatment going to allow her the restraint she desires only until he snatches Akane's hope away by denying her the punishment she thinks she needs (craves)?

I'd personally prefer that she ends up a wanton animal who doesn't discriminate between male appendages. But any scenario would be good I suppose.

On a side note: So Akane's grades are suffering aye? Might I suggest that, after failing an important test, she pays a special visit to one of her teachers? She could go to him with the pretense of offering a sexual favor or he could suggest it to her--at this point, either makes sense. I think a good middle ground however, would be him rejecting her request for a make-up test to which she responds with a sexual proposition. That makes for a good "whore" aspect.

And I thought it would have been better with Ukyo raping Akane so as to establish a pecking order or hidden feelings of sapphism. But since you've decided to go the "psycho bitch" angle, that works far better--especially with Ranma. Please don't have Ranma get some kind of revenge on her. It really serves the atmosphere to give her Psycho-bitchiness an efficacy that Ranma's unable to overcome.

As for Ryoga, I'm really curious at this point how you'll choose to use him. Will he follow the trend of corruption and/or betrayal and take advantage of Ranma's situation? Or will he be a true friend that Ranma opens up to, but still somehow ends up with Ranma stuck on his cock?

Excellent chapter. I'm glad your brief hiatus was so brief.
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From Scorpinac on June 29, 2009
Well, the possibility of Kuno raping Girl-Ranma I arguably really should have seen coming, though Ukyo just snapping like that was somewhat unexpected. Kodachi I could see doing that one way or the other, most likely using a combination of paralysis and arousal drugs on him to make sure she got him without him getting away(thankfully, Rumiko never considered having her do that to him in canon!), but Ukyo?! Damn... This is going to lead to badness... And yet another horrid though springs into mind, what if Mikado Sanzenin comes into the picture and finds out?! Course, I kept hoping for him to learn Ranma's secrete and proceed to slice off his own lips in disgust, but, oh well. Until chapter 10, I suppose...
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From ANON - thtiger on June 25, 2009
Another well done chapter. and a combination of almost comedy, for this sort of story, with Hiroshi's I can't miss this chance even if I die, attitude, and then we see Akane finally breaking, at least in some regards. She's never going to be the same again.
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From ANON - John Olsen on June 25, 2009
Quite an amazing story, well developed the transformation of Akane, I can imagine she will end being quite a submissive nympho before Ranma arrives. Akane just need to learn to "love" a woman, maybe a friend who discover her afliction and is secretly want her because Akane had all the boys? after all is the only thing left to her to learn, acept and enjoy.

Wonder what story are you going to write about Ranma? can imagine what will happen to him really. And what of the rest of the Nerima crew?

Cant wait to read more soon.

JO
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From ANON - Pariah on June 23, 2009
Something just occurred to me with regards to Hiroshi.

While Akane's now more honest with herself about how she's changed in accordance with her lifestyle, I realize that doesn't necessarily mean she's gonna start trolling for men and going out of her way to act like a harlot. However, since it's already been established that she's actually comfortable with Hiroshi on some level, it'd be interesting to see her SUGGEST more than just a handjob at some point simply because she was grateful for his ministrations.
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From ANON - Pariah on June 22, 2009
"Tell everyone what you are, Akane,"

That was excellent. From beginning to end, that was a flawless piece of erotica. And truly, that monologue was the perfect climax.

Sorry to be bittersweet, but I am SO satisfied that I have no suggestions to offer right now.

Wait...Maybe one. Assuming you don't have any other plans for Ukyo that are too complex, might I suggest making her Akane's lesbian tormentor? It'd be interesting to see if that breaks new taboo ground for Akane (aside from that one snippet about Ranma-chan performing cunnilingus on her, sapphism seems to be a point of ambivalence for her). It'd definitely serve as a means of demonstrating feelings of betrayal.

Sorry about the real life stuff.
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From ninesenshi on June 21, 2009
Very good chapter 7. The detail and build-up is appreciated. Hikaru is making a very good master for Akane. Hope to see more. I could definately see Akane accepting him as her master, although her moral upbringing will drive her to continue to resist.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 20, 2009
Well done. I also was curious as to when you'd touch on Anal. You did a great job of mixing a little reality into a porn story and making it the more interesting for it.
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From ANON - Pariah on June 20, 2009
Finally some anal. I didn't wanna say anything, but with regards to humiliation, I always look forward to it. Having her push herself the rest of the way onto Gos was a nice touch. It makes one wonder whether or not her butt will become her preferred sexual outlet since it'd be hard for her to ignore how much her orgasm dragged on. Wonder what's gonna happen with that plug of hers. *wink wink*

The enema was the second awesome thing about this installment, but I have to give an honorable mention to the manga idea. That was creative. I wouldn't have chosen bestiality, but the whole idea behind quizzing her on reading pornography was a nice touch.

The condom was a turn-off, but I suppose there will be time enough for Akane to get a sperm enema.

Akane, while not entirely corrupted, has been thoroughly schooled on maintaining the perception of herself as a slut. After getting her more acquainted with anal, I think another masturbation session is in order. I suggest this because she might have difficulty getting herself off without thinking and (possibly) making particularly obscene commentary about her state this time around. It's not gonna be so easy this time, so she'll be forced to be creative.

7 for 7. Good job.
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From ninesenshi on June 19, 2009
Enjoyed chap 6, story is coming along nicely. Good developement of Gosunkugi.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 17, 2009
Wonderful chapter. Very interesting to see Akane's reaction. She might not be a slut, but she is obviously a very sexual person to have such powerful orgasms, and to need that release so badly as to lose control. Nice to see you answering questions before they are asked, such as how can the boys get away with making Akane vanish all the time.

Bondage is all about the fantasy, there is something so sexy about a girl in tight bondage, but the old spread eagle is pretty vanilla. About what you'd expect from a teen-age boy with a limited budget.

I can't believe that Akane is telling her family that she's going to study with boys every night. She must be telling them she's going to a girl friends house.
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From ANON - Pariah on June 17, 2009
Oh. And one more thing.

"the one place in Nerima where she could feel safe."

I'll be damned if that's not foreshadowing.

What do you got planned you sly dog?

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From ANON - Pariah on June 17, 2009
Thank you for implementing my suggestion. It was a well done segment to a good chapter.

There's an interesting nuance to that segment too. Hikaru tells her that she's not a slut and she's just being forced, but he also elaborated that he didn't want her to break. You have to wonder whether he's just being disingenuous for her sake. I wonder if, along the way, she's going to explore exactly what the meaning of "slut" is. Her pleasure [i]is[/i] indeed being coerced. However, her frequent exposure to sex is causing her to uncharacteristically think about sex more often. Does that mindset in and of itself compose the disposition of a slut.

Such a controversy might be what breaks her.

Beyond that, I'm glad you had her ask him for help to break free. I was thinking about that just the other day. With him being so unnecessarily kind to her, I imagined that she would develop some kind of Stockholme-like symptoms and try to run to him when she got scared. When I read that it felt like you read my mind.

And, oh, the Soapland service. That was just....So awesome.
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