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By : hsaotome

From ninesenshi on June 16, 2009
Good chapter. Enjoying the fun.
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From ANON - Pariah on June 15, 2009
I'm enjoying your efficiency in churning these out. Very good work.

An observation: You're make a point of stressing that Akane tries to mentally escape her situation by fantasizing about Ranma quite a bit. I have a feeling this in and of itself is building up to something. On the off chance that you're not, I would like to suggest that there are two ways to address this.

On one hand, you can have Michio or someone else notice that she's going elsewhere when they penetrate her and then force her to look into their eyes while she's being raped so she can't try and deny that she's enjoying their ministrations (as opposed to Ranma's).

Or--and this probably the more effective scenario--if and when Ranma comes back and she tries to consummate a relationship with him, he comes up short, so to speak, in making her orgasm, and that causes her to unconsciously think about the situations where she's raped. Whether Ranma's inadequacy has to do with size, stamina, or experience is at your discretion. I'd suggest it'd be the first of the three however since Akane knows that's not something that can be helped.

Good chapter. I especially liked how you showed she was becoming desensitized to the sex during the Home Ec room session.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 15, 2009
Just as you mentioned you're going after Akane's mind as much as her body. I wonder how long before Akane starts to notice that her body is already ready for her apointments, without her having to put any extra effort in.

You're certainly putting the work in on this story. Keep up the good work and I hope to see many more chapters.
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From ninesenshi on June 14, 2009
Good chapter. Looking forward to more.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 14, 2009
This is the first Ranma lemon In I don't know how long that I'm saving to my own files. It's a keeper for sure. And I intend to keep writing reviews for as long as you keep writing chapters, and I encourage anyone who's reading this to do so as well. If you love this sort of well written extreme Ranma lemon, than you should encourage the author to keep up the good work.

The doctor thing took me by surprise, which is always a good thing in a story you read, and you took the time to explain why a Doctor refered by Tofu could do this. Akane's safety zone has now shrunken to her own home. I'm wondering if you're going to have that taken away from her as well. Imagine if Ryouga learns of her situation via P-chan, and like the doctor can't help himself and changes in the night and slips into her room. Of course, being Ryouga, it could just as easyly turn out that the room he slipped into was Nabiki's. That would certainly add to Akane's guilt as she would be sure that Nabiki's rape had something do with her own situation.

It was good that you brought up the suicide thing, and dimissed it, as I'm sure some readers would consider it a response she might take. I don't by the way. This is a porn universe, and it no more needs to consider real life anymore than the original manga did.

I think you should cure Akane's Moxibustion point. Unlike Ranma's her's was applied by a beginner, would not be surprising that he did not manage to hit it well enough for a permenanent effect. Got to thinking that it would be a rather nasty trick on Akane if she were to find out several chapters down the road that she does have her strength back, but due to her doing everything in her power not to give away that she is weak, that she has no idea when it came back, or how many times she was raped or spanked when she could have fought back.

It would not in and of itself free her from the boys. It's the blackmail that has her trapped by them now, not her weakness. It would be another level of victim hood. Being able to fight back, but not being able to fight back, if you get what I mean. Mind you I would like to think that the boys are just the first story arc of a series that will continue for a long time. Because there is a whole world of potential Akane violaters out there, as the Doctor just proved, and not all of them need a weak Akane to pull it off.

Even if she got her strength back, and got free of the boys, maybe by convincing them that she was willing to kill them if she had nothing else to lose, it would not free her. It would be a real nice twist if she frees herself from this first group of rapists, and is feeling empowered as a result with a restored confidence, only to fall victim to martial artists who she can't beat at her level. There are a lot of them. Even her own father, who was the disiple of a very perverted master after all. In the porn universe, him getting evidence in the mail that his daughter is a slut would be more than enough to cause for him to 'punish' her. If you went over the top on it, he might even ask Genma's help in teaching his slut of a daughter a lesson.

There are all sorts of people the disgruntled boys could send the photos too, without doing so publicly and bringing down the wrath of a fully powered Akane with nothing to lose on them.

Don't worry that I will be disgruntled if you don't follow up on my suggestions. I just have fun thinking about where things might go.

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From ANON - Pariah on June 13, 2009
Hehe. Poor Akane. She just can't catch a break.

I wonder how many sexual favors she's gonna owe by the end of the next installment.

Random thought: I wonder how Nabiki would react to this. Would she feel sorry for her little sister and try to help her OR would she be more inclined to cash in? :est we forget how she was willing to sell pictures of her in various states of undress.

Just throwing it out there.

Great chapter.
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From ANON - aclark on June 12, 2009
Ramna can be in the story but as the dark hero .He could use this as way to get back at Akane for all the times she's hit him and called him names .

I think Akane's fear of being rape should play a bigger part in the story .It's all most like Akane is okay with being rape/blackmailed and doesn't try to fight back in some way.Her fear of rape should make her put up a fight in someway .

I think Akane can like the idea of sex but doesn't like who she having it with .For example, Akane can get off but only when she thinks about Ramna, You can have Michio found out about it which will make him to try even harder to break her .But she doesn't really give in nor does she break .

I like your story

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From ANON - Pariah on June 12, 2009
Very good addition. The humiliation aspect was much more satisfying this time around. I especially liked the subtly of having Akane walk around naked before realizing she didn't need to.

With regards to Ryouga and P-chan: Please don't have him play the night in shining armor. With the tone of the story it would make a lot more sense for him to be tempted to get in on the action. Having her tell P-chan about her trouble would be a good idea. But instead of filling him with righteous fury, perhaps it would wake up darker feelings of lust and jealousy that he struggles with until he decides to take Michio's toy away.

Including Ranma would be a mistake unless you plan on having him subjugated as a helpless female. One of the things your stressed in the first installation was the feelings of hopelessness complemented by by his absence. Unless you plan to make him the FAILED hero who's dragged down with Akane, don't involve him.
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From ninesenshi on June 12, 2009
Getting better again. In Chapter1 you focused alot more on describing the sex as it was happening. I would like to see more of that. Domination is enjoyable, but so is sex. Also hoping for a good detailed scene of Akane losing her anal virginity. As regards P-chan, if Ryoga finds out what is happening it's hard not to imagine him killing all these guys. Anyway, keep working at it.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 12, 2009
No wish for beast from this guy. I'm not a fan of Ryouga's curse as it applies to lemons. Pretty useless. I am a big fan of Ranma-chan in peril, so I would certainly love to see her side by side with Akane bent over a table or a pair of desks. You continue to show imagination in the story, I do wonder about the guys who have not gotten another taste of Akane for two days. They must be getting pretty hard up. And big plans for them on Saturday. That's the day when they only go to school in the morning, and have the rest of the day off. A half-hour hardly gives any of them time to really get warmed up.
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From ninesenshi on June 11, 2009
Glad to see another chapter. Not as good as the first but I remain hopeful for the future. The excitment of non-con is watching a reluctant girl forced to give sex and ultimately enjoying it, although she does not accept that enjoyment. Fics where the girl turns into a slut who enjoys being forced and craves it are losing the continuing reluctance of non-con. So I hope you are not planning to go that route. I think it's a mistake to complicate things by bringing in Ranma rather then focusing on Akane who was the star of this story to start with, but you are the author. I'll keep reading as long as it's good.
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From ANON - thtiger on June 10, 2009
First rate job. I had despaired at ever again coming across a really well written and sexually explicit Ranma lemon on the net. I hope you continue this series for a long time. And if you'd be interested in more in depths reviews and maybe a pre-reader, drop me a line.

I'm all for Akane being rescued, only maybe it's more going from the frying pan into the fire.

I'll offer a plot suggestion.

Akane can't tell anyone 'human' about her woes, But what about P-chan. Might she confess all to him from the need to express her troubles to someone, even if it's a pet who can't understand a word she's saying.

And maybe she'd confess her more and more frequent fantasies where Ranma replaces her tormentors as her dominating lover.

Even had this little bit of dialogue pop into my head today.

"What are you doing. I have photos. I can ruin Akane. Don't you understand."

"Of course I do. That's why I broke your arms, and not your neck. Now if those photos happened to go public. well, then I'd have no reason not to do that. Would I?"
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From ANON - pariah on June 10, 2009
Awesome. Everytime I come to the Ranma section, I hope and pray that there's something new....And good. And this was just awesome.

Very well written in it's darkly erotic tone. It's emotionally objective towards Akane and refrains from overdosing the narrative with commentary on how much her psyche was shattered or her confidence is compromised, which helps along a very grainy, macabre decorum. You kept the description of her feelings very minimalist, allowing the fic to emphasize the presence of misery rather than the misery itself. And seeing the heretofore innocent victim--Akane in this case--miserable complements the erotic weight of the rape. I'm glad someone finally realized that rape in a dark atmosphere can be written erotically rather than seriously as though the story was a chick flick.

When it comes to conflicts in hentai, bad endings are the best. So I suggest you keep it dark or it would just ruin the mood. Don't give her an inch. Or if you do, take the wind out of her sale in the end.

And yeah, I do hate Akane, but I just wanted to share that I'd give the same treatment to my favorite characters (Ryoga and Shampoo) while making my most hated character the more fortunate one in my own story. Such is the essence of kink I suppose; our desire to see our favored characters treated conversely in a lemon than how we'd usually want them to be. So I totally understand where you're coming from.
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From Scorpinac on June 10, 2009
Frankly, if Akane were smart, at this point she'd pack a bag as heavy as she can currently carry and just get out of town leaving a note that she's gone to find Ranma and bring him home, or something along those lines. Just saying. In the meantime, could at least Michio suffer a relatively violent comeuppance, say, at the front end of a moving bus? Just asking. Laters.
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From ninesenshi on June 08, 2009
Hi,
I don't think you need to explain your work. That being said, I liked it. Well written and described. Dark, sexy. As you said, porn. Good porn. I hope to see another chapter or sequel with more Akane abuse. (Though I also like the character). Please, no rescue for Akane. I don't need to read about her being saved. If I wanted that, I would not be reading non-con stories on an adult site.
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