Reviews for The Wall Within KirikaBy : BeefJerkyYo |
Hello Beef_Jerkins,
should have waited another year, then it would have been a decade. *laughs* I am supprised that you noticed my comment.
I still like your story and Kirika in it. Reading how Mireille is tortured by her silent waiting is exactly what I'd expect to happen. It's out of character (strange as I said back then) for Kirika to be persistent about an unanswered question, but having her just stare askingly at Mirelle - what I'd expect her to do - would only have dragged the story boringly along and it truely is new for her. Mireille's ironhard willpower compared with her sultry words ist fitting.
The story could be continued with Mireille tutoring Kirika about relationships, marriage and what it means to love another women. Or the story could get a second time-line/universe/second-chapter in wich one of both feel a more mother-child kind of love and they'd have to deel with that - I like the sotry-idea but not the second time-line. ;-)
Greetings
Juy Juka
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