Reviews for Kari\'s GiftBy : Talonias |
I loved the way you write !!!
Keeping things going slow, getting the relation kinkier every chapter, the games they play, the ice and the fear of getting caught in the last chapter.
Everything is excelent! My favorite TK and Kari fic !!
As to who went off first, I'm good either way. As to the fic in general, I am enjoying it, warm and fluffy bits and TK the dom bits and all. Probably helps that it isn't heavy BDSM, honestly, but regardless. I'll just get myself prepared for the long slog until chapter 10 then. Ta.
I think keeping TK in charge would be more interesting, and probably more fulfilling to both of them (I have a feeling Sora would enjoy both equally)
Holy crap, you're alive! Sorry, but it has been quite a while since the last chapter went up. Over a year, I think....
Anyway, enjoying this so far, and as to the current game, umm, oo, hard questions, but, uhh, oh, go with TK, he's been pretty reasonable so far. He is gonna tell her the cams are fake eventually, right?
It's been long enough since you updated I don't know if you'll see this, but I really like the pacing of this fic.
Normally in a fic like this a blowjob would be the first "test" and there would be anal by the end of the first night, but instead you had them push slower. The pair pushed their boundaries up one by one, exploring fetishes slowly and it paid off.
Plus the characterization is good too, Kari's quiet humiliation, TK's split between trying to be a gentleman and trying to enjoy the moment. Sora's brazen attitude toward the whole thing. (and I can't help but notice she never actually put out an end point on being TK's slave).
I am eager to see what comes next.
I'd love to see this finished!
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