Reviews for RentBy : Bishonen |
Super sexy. Motoko's sister should get broken also.
I love how you did the story but could you add more to it. I like the idea what some suggested about kitsune in the comments. Think it would be interesting given what premise of the story. Update soon will you.
Hey yeah great story or whatever, listen more importantly I'd like to use this story as a flimsy pretext to ask that you write an elaborate story for me that focuses on a dude even though it's patently obvious that the point of this story was to be about lesbians. I know it seems like writing a multi-chapter story that caters to my specific whims instead of yours seems like a lot of trouble, but just think about how much it will develop this story which I've left pretty much no actual feedback for even though this is a review of it!
Well done, unusual pairing and nicely written. I liked Love Hina a lot.
Well it looks interesting. Possible to expand on this one and get more of the story. Would be funny funny if it was found out by Keitaro but in twist of fate he force Haruka in to submission for "stealing" his rent. After all he is the manager. Would not mind if you expand on the idea and add some others in to the mix. Maybe Keitaro got idea to do it also after he learns about it. Maybe to that with Kitsune. He would have plenty of reasons to do it to. For one she was always out of cash, always late for rent, constantly put him in danger by giving false hints that he did something inappropriately. Not to mention she had few times try to seduce him by wearing sexy underware to con herself out of paying knowing he would panic and as always agrees to it.
I can totally imagen her shocked face if he after some of her tries to make him give his money to her or to make him forget about her rent drops the bombshell by blackmailing her with all her dept in to submission, reducing her to his fuckpet. Maybe add some small collar that would be visible, making it so she is like a his personal trophy out on the open to make things more interesting outside with other girls since they don't know.
What could be use for blackmail is numerous. The money she owns him, the possible kicking out on the streets, the time she steal his money to bet on horse races, the problem she made for him. Also with all the betting and drinking it would not be surprise if she had some Dept's outside of him that Keitaro could use to get firm grip on her.
Could add that Haruka noticed that use that for start how he got Haruka for punishment for taking his rent.
All in all the start looks promising and I hope you will do a fallow up on your story and expand on it.
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