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By : Sesshai

From ANON - shuiede on February 08, 2005
oh my.....I don't know exactly what to say. *chortles* I just hope you have a deeper reason why you did this kind of writing, man. I,too, am not a talented writer but after reading this.....oh man! I know it's hard to make a nice and a very heart-felt fic. Been there, done that. It's hard to choose the right words for your ideas. Hard to pull it through. There will be more time in the world to practice it further. Godspeed.
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From ANON - Evil Karyta on December 18, 2004
I decided to read your story after reading one horrible review this story recieved. I could not let this go un-noticed. Feeling conserned, and as an amateur writer myself, I thought I would read your story and see if it really was that bad. I must say, the story plot is not to my liking. I dislike out-of-characterism (i just made that word up but i suppose you understand what i mean, if not send me an e-mail and i'll rectify that). I love to read fanfactions that takes the real characters, the one we all love and know well into awkward situation and have reactions that are acording to what they are in the orriginal context. I do not enjoy rape stories much either though I'm not 'against' it, more like uninterested. This is my personnal opinion as well as an explaination as to why I will not continue to read this story. Do not take it personnally.

As for your writing style there is much to improuve. I'm suspecting that maybe you are not a native english speaker. That is alright, I'm not either. I would like to know how old you actually are. I don't mean to say you're not supposed to write that kind of stuff, nor am I telling you that you not a good writer because of that, but someone that age usually is looking for their writing style and explorating means of expression through written words. I might be wrong as well. It all really depends as to when you actually started to write. But that is beside the point.

I suggest you reread yourself often, at least 3 times before posting a chapter. Sometimes, excited by your ideas, you write fast and forget words, ponctuation, majuscules or verb tenses. Also, I must agree with the awfull flamer, tou definatly should pick up a point of view and stick to it. Or, if you rather, change the format of your writing to italic when you speak a character's mind out loud. It is much less confusing.

As for the rest, I suggest you try at short stories to improuve your writing skills. Orriginal stories are good practices and can become quite usefull someday. A few tips also would be for you to write out a definit plan for your story so you know where you are going. Losing the point of a story and mixing 4 or 5 different plots in the same can be confusing for the read if the writer is not experimented enough. I know few good stories (fanfictions and orriginals alike) that turned out good with many plots. Although it's not the case of this one story, I think it should be good to have this in mind for the future stories to come.

I also suggest that you try keeping the characters that you borrow true to themselves. For exemple, Kaoru is a strong woman that would fight with a passion for her honor. Sano is rightous, even though he might be apear a little slow, it has much to do to the fact that he does not think much before acting.

I would as well recomand that you find yourself a proof-reader and an editor. If you can't make the difference, a proof-reader is someone that can partially tell you what is wrong and what is good about a story and suggest changes, an editor is someone that will correct spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as typos and other frustrating little stupid mistakes someone can let slipt through.

Don't let yourself be discouraged by stupid people that has nothing constructive to tell you. Those people should not be alwoed to review. I think it even worse when those kind of people does not leave any e-mail. They are rude people, and cowards. Do not give up on writing. You must keep writing so to practice and become a better writer. Stories will improve and the apreciation of your readers will rise as well.

The best of luck in your present and future projects. I'll be on the look out for probably another story from you so to see if I have been heard.

Evil Karyta
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From ANON - kali_yuga on November 27, 2004
After reading through all the reveiws, i've come to the conclusion that all the reveiws that go something like: "OMG you updated *dances around lke a fucktard* Have either got to be your friends, or just you reveiwing your own fic. Seriously. Give this story a run through Microsoft word and spell check it. And fic the freaking tenses. I sugest you make the whole story 3rd person in Kaoru's POV.
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From ANON - kali_yuga on November 27, 2004
wow..This has got to be one of the worst things i've ever read. Step one to fixing this story would be paragraph breaks when a new person speaks. Step two would be getting someone to look over this story and fix the spelling and grammar. Those two things alone would elevate this from atrocious to simply bad. I'm afraid you would have to pretty much scrap this and redo it to have any sembalance of IC characters. I mean, seriously... Do you REALLY think Sano would just rape Kaoru and she wouldn't do anything? I mean MAYBE if you gave a little more insite into his mind as to why he did it..and then devoted a bit to the angst Kaoru wrestles with after being violated by her friend, this could shape up to be halfway decent. As it is, its MST worthy. And if you are going to write something without a plot, at least make the lemons good! Shesh, pay attention in english class from now on kid.
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From ANON - Steph R. on November 19, 2004
Wow. I'm sorry, but there's absolutely no way I can get into this story. I mean yeah...you're characters are OOC, but that's not really a big deal considering the whole point of FANFICTION is making up YOUR OWN story they way you see fit, frankly I don't care about how you portray the characters' personalities. You've got issues with grammar, spelling, and capitalization obviously. Why don't you look into a beta-reader? Or even spell check. I'm almost positive you have it, it's really simple. You can take this review as a flame or as friendly advice or whatever. I'm not a real big fan of flaming, especially since most of the flames are posted by imbeciles who obviously can't comprehend that if you don't like something STOP READING IT. Jesus Christ. I hope you have enough sense to ignore most of them. Some of these flames do make really good points...so perhaps it would be a good idea to maybe tweak your writing a bit. As for the flames that tell you to kill yourself..McNinja or whatever the hell your name is, seriously how old are you? It's obvious you don't like this fanfiction, so why do you keep reading it? Just to make stupid reviews like the previous ones? This fic isn't very appealing, but damn if you aren't dumb. "Kill yourself because I don't like this fanfiction but I'm going to keep on reading it anyway, even though I want the author to discontinue writing it." I bet you're in elementary school, and even if you're not, you sure as hell deserve to be. Idiot.
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From ANON - fish on August 23, 2003
YYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!
You Updated!! I'm SO Proud!! *gives you big hug*
Now you need to update really really soon!!!
*does puppy dog eyes*
oh.and please e-mail me!!
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From ANON - Kiren on May 20, 2004
If I was your English teacher, I would give this a F and suggest tutoring. Your writing level is that of a 7 year olds. 'U' is NOT a word, it's a letter, and cannot be interchanged with 'yo you you can't spell (Who the HELL is Karuo or Karou or however you mangled her name?), your capitalization SUCKS, and every last one of the characters is OOC. Sano would never, EVER hurt Kaoru like that, she's like his little sister! Not only that, but Kaoru would not be so passive about being raped... she'd be fighting like hell, and he would not come away unmarked from the experience, not only that, but she would want vengeance for his actions, and would come after him. Kenshin LOVES Kaoru, both as Battousai and Rurouni, and Battousai is a cold-blooded assassin, but he is NOT some mindless, blood thirsty killing machine, and if you had ever actually seen Rurouni Kenshin or Samurai X you would know this about him, and anybody who has watched even part of RK would know how Kenshin, Kaoru, and Sano should be characterized, so I must surmise that you've either never seen RK, or you've seen one or two episodes and decided that you wanted to apply the RK characters to some shitty story, despite the fact that none of them would actually react in such a way. (Except for Kenshin killing Sano... if Sano ever did something like that to Kaoru, I do believe Kenshin would probably severely injure him, and maybe even kill him.) I'm surprised that this has gotten so many positive reviews, especially since I've read fics that are hundreds of times better with half the reviews of this fic. I guess there is a lot of sick people out there who are fascinated by the idea of Kaoru getting raped by someone she considers to be an annoying older brother and then killed by the man she loves. -.-
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From ANON - Anon on April 02, 2004
What a mockery of the English language ! If you're going to write, write it right ! No punctuation, or capitalization of proper nouns, and the use of a "u" instead of writing "you" is unacceptable. You need to go back to school and learn how to construct proper English sentences!
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From on December 05, 2003
YAY! you updated ^_^ happy happy could you tell me when u update PLEASE? Thanks? Oh, Short chapter but it was a nice one. I hope your next one will be better?
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From ANON - Fishy-Chan on November 12, 2003
*huggles you*
YOU UPDATED!!!!! I'M SO PROUD!!!!
*throws you party*
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From ANON - Kari on October 22, 2003
Oh my God. How could you have gotten this many reviews and so few flames?

It boogles my mind....

You don't even capitalize "I." Jesus Christ. And where's your god damn puncuation?

You need to fix your writing. There's no other way to say it.
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From ANON - CybrEmly01 on October 22, 2003
This is a decent y. y. (I'm all gushy, YUCK! lol)

Don't let the nay-sayers get ya down. If they're all that wonderful, where are their fics?
(small rant) Huh? Where? Where, tell me? Where, huh?

*deep breath, slow exhale* Okay, better now.

Update soon please.

Ja,
CybrEmly01
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From ANON - McNinja on October 22, 2003
And another thing: Everyone who've given this "story" of yours a positive review is a fucking moron.
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From ANON - McNinja on October 22, 2003
Two new chapters, and not surprisingly, they suck even worse than the previous two. Please kill yourself, mkay?
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From ANON - Anon on October 17, 2003
o yea sano's dead
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