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Reviews for All Work and Then Play

By : Seratu
  • From ANON - Lexie on April 17, 2004
    Since my first fanfic was a K/T pairing, I was glad to see this story. The problem with this pairing, I've found, is that it's hard to get lighthearted with them, what with the impending catastrophe and all. So after my first fic I haven't felt compelled to write more, but it's nice to see some other ones out there!
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  • From ANON - wistful-eyes on January 18, 2004
    Yay! A TomoeXKenshin lemon fic...there aren't very many of these around. (;_;) ...So, thank you for contributing. Hope you write more, later on. ^^' I discovered this site only a while ago...I need to make an account. Then, here comes the TXK! ^_^ Cyz!
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  • From ANON - fuzzy on December 09, 2003
    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
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  • From ANON - Jessie on December 06, 2003
    Let me say, that wasn't bad at all contrary to what you kept telling me. There are some spelling errors that you should probably look at (simple stuff like "he" instead of "the") but nothing too big. I'm not possitive, but I think thier "nightwear" is called a yukata. It might sound better if you called it that, but it doesn't matter too much.

    The only part of the story that seemed off was that I don't think Kenshin knew that Kiosato (or whatever the guy's name was) was Tomoe's fioncee (sp?) until the traitor guy told him (you know, the wonderfully dramatic scene when he is told Tomoe is the traitor and is ordered to kill her).

    I liked it. I read lemons all the time (mainly because I miss my boyfriend too much) and this one was pretty good, at least in my opinion. I like the fact that the more vulgar words were avoided and that their weren't silly descriptors in order to avoid using vulgar words (although the use of the word "orifice"--or however it's spelled--did sound a bit too weird for me). Overall, I liked it. I hope this review was helpful! Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - KanzenNeTsuki on December 04, 2003
    I liked this very much... and I am not a big fan of k/t pairings. Woful ful job! Keep up the good work.
    Tsuki-san
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  • From clayangel on December 04, 2003
    Okay... Like I said, not bad. I get the feeling that you're a young write (younger than me, at least) and if that's the case, then it's quite good. I'll start with the good stuff. I think the writing itself is good. No severe grammatical errors (which are a HUGE pet peeve of mine) and good descriptions and whatnot. The problems I had weren't with the writing itself. The entire second paragraph, however, is completely unessecary. You're just telling the audience information that we already know. It doesn't help to set up the scene in the slightest. Also there were some spelling errors. They look like ones that a spell check would have missed. You really need to read through your story once more after it's finished to catch any errors. I never do, and then I end up having to repost it. ^_^;; One last thing. There is no way in Hell that Kenshin would cook Tomoe dinner. (insert long complicated explanation of Japanes culture) I know he does it for Kaoru, but that's a completely different situation. And I would bet you money that he'd stop cooking after they got married. That is, if she'd let him. ^_^
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