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Reviews for I Wish

By : ladyfaye06
  • From Rezalda on July 21, 2008
    This was a very sweet fic, but I'll save for what I liked best about it for last.

    I just have a couple of criticisms. First of all, the word "recess" for "mouth" is unnecessary, and it makes the writing sound awkward. People who read this story might not know that "recess" can be used that way, and could get confused. Secondly, the anal fingering was a little fast, and I almost missed it. Don't be afraid to draw it out a little!

    But what I really liked about this story was that is showed how anal sex isn't the be-all, end-all of gay love. One can have a good time without someone's penis in someone's anus. Of course, there's nothing wrong with that, but one does get a bit tired of seeing it in every single fic!
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  • From goodchaos on January 12, 2008
    Even though this was written A LOONG Time ago and so I figure most likely you probably stopped writing, and probably won't read this, I still want to leave a review because it's that Good! This should really be continued!! Plz come back!
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  • From ANON - lovagirlalot on February 07, 2006
    oh and i love that your the only person fic that i have read that when the person writed Dick and Cock insted of Hard member. man that a set off. Dick and cock those words give it more spasm. god i love those word, Dick and cock, never lose that. i cant stand hard member. worth a piece of shit.
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  • From ANON - lovagirlalot on February 07, 2006
    Omg..that was great.

    i read it once though and i can tell you had alot of mistakes. i usualy read twice before i can tell. but yours was really easy. you kept repeating words. and the begining felt a little rushed like you was hurrying to get to the sex. now the sex was great well oral sex was great. this story could have been longer and more intresting then it actually is.

    now the thing i don't get was that touya walked (the rate your story was going speed walked) over to yukito house. did he like wait until his erection go done or somthing or was it cold out side.

    because if you are erected and your thinking about the person that erected you in your sleep don't you think you will stay erect (i already know i'm not spelling it right).

    i just didn't get that.

    but what i like the most was the oral sex because you did rush your story. but when reading the sex part thats the way i like it. Rushe but alot still happening like its going on forever and that was sweet. great story i would give it and 8/10 ta tah for now ;}
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  • From ANON - Kaiba-chan on April 18, 2005
    It's cutesey more than anything else. I would have prefered a little more plot with slower action during the sex scene. Perhaps more of a continuance on how they feel in the morning, or go deeper into each man's feelings during the time. We got all of Touya's feelings, but none of Yukito's except what he said.
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  • From ANON - Random on January 07, 2005
    Nice, but kind of old fashioned...Could use a little plot.
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  • From ANON - Doreen on August 21, 2004
    That was bloody great! I loved this fic!
    keep on writing- you're good at it.

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  • From ladyfaye06 on July 31, 2004
    Hello my fellow aff.net readers!
    I want to take the time to think evryone who has rated my story so far. This is my f fic fic posted and my first yaoi fic that I have written. I realize that the review process here is slow. Therefore I am asking that all of you who read my story please REVIEW it. Your critcism is much needed and greatly appreciated. I would love to know what you as the reader thought of my story since I realize that I have a lot to learn when it comes to my fics and I would like for you guys the raders to help me out a little by REVIEWING my fics. Flames are even welcome just as long as you REVIEW.

    Thanks a lot,
    Ladyfaye06 =)
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