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Reviews for Hospital Seductress

By : DarkDevoted
  • From SaintGabriel on July 09, 2007
    That's a pretty interesting concept. However... the way you're writing it... it's not very exciting. I mean, mages??!! What, in the future people are fighting with swords and magic? I don't see any detail on how the war is being fought. You gotta know something about the military before you write a military drama!

    Still, things are going fine. You should add a little more detail, and I do feel you should something about the whole... "mages" thing. Seriously.

    God bless ya,
    The Black Shirt

    P.S: maybe I can help? I can do Daisuke's POV (point of view). By the way, what does Riku do?
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  • From ANON - Tiamat on November 09, 2005
    I love it! ^_^ Update soon!
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  • From ANON - ramona on September 11, 2005
    People are so mean! Come on, you read this really good fic; a simple 'good' would be nice. Or even if you didn't like it, you could at least say why. It's only going to be three chapters long; the least you can do is tell the author how they're doing. Well, 'I' like your fic, and I can't wait for another chapter. Until then, I'll just be mad on your behalf. *Hmph*

    BTW, I like reading a pairing that's not Daisuke/Dark or Daisuke/Satoshi. For some reason, Yu-Gi-Oh ruined me for the literal 'live-in-lover' thing, and...I don't know, something about Satoshi creeps me out. I like Riku (I think she's the strongest of the twins, and she complements Dai nicely). You're a little ooc, but it's an AU, right, so that's okay. I like the fact that even though you kept Mio *shudder* you kept her in character, and I'm intrigued by the mystery voice in Riku's head. No major spelling or grammar mistakes; you obviously took your time and worked on this. Good job!
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