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Reviews for Giving In

By : Enima
  • From ANON - Anon on April 04, 2010
    took me a moment to remember this scenario, but when I did I was like "Oh! yeah right, that awesome scene"
    this was awesome. I loved how you picked that scene and developed it, and overall it was well written. The only downside, which has been pointed out by other reviewers, is your punctuation, not distinguishing moviments and actions in the middle of a line with " or even - gets confusing, but it is understandable
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  • From Charmz on January 27, 2009
    Y'know, I don't think Soubi's a pedophile. Yeah, he gave Natsuo & Yoji a place to live, but he's not hot for them. He just loves Ritsuka only. He wants to make love to Ritsuka because ... well, that's how guys express their luv. ^_^ Awwww! Meanwhile, I think it would've been funny for the four zeroes to get to talking & then go out for a bag of doughnuts instead of fighting & then come back to the apt & find Soubi and Ritsuka snuggling in bed. ^_^
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  • From AliceInuzukaAburame on October 15, 2007
    X3...loved it very very much
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  • From sienta on June 03, 2007
    That was pretty good:) Soubi and Ritsuke make a beautiful and sweet couple(starry eyed)
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  • From GravitationInnocence on January 20, 2007
    ohmegosh, i loved it. this is perfect, EXACTLY the fic i was looking for; what would have happened if they didnt go to the fight. wow, amazing!!!!
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  • From ANON - Sirk on July 26, 2006
    you know i have been wonder this very thing, thank you for confirming my suspisions. great story, Maby the actuale author will use it. she seems to be heading in that direction. XD
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  • From ladygizarme on October 06, 2005
    erm... wow, i guess i write too much.. cont'd from my last review: using elipses like that, esp. in the midst of actual speaking, it's kind of annoying and confusing.. when reading a fic, it's more enjoyable to have the actions written out descriptively rather than netspeak, plus using elipses to insert the action during speech is more confusing since you also use them to put space between panted words and such... the immediate translation of the japanese in parenthese was kinda annoying to me too, but i guess for people that don't know what the words mean it may be better, so i won't complain too much :p

    anyway, as i said, it was a sweet lil one-shot, and if you keep writing, you'll definitely get better and better! you have great potential ^__^

    ~ lg
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  • From ladygizarme on October 06, 2005
    so sweet, that was pretty good for a first... and their feelings, emotions, and interactions came across very well and in character i think... i'm glad someone finished that scene, cuz it sucked they got interrupted heheheh (gomen, i'm evil) ..though i do have a couple suggestions... besides just normal grammatical/spelling errors that are easy to overlook, when you put actions within elipses (or asterisk as some people also do in their writing ...glares at elipses... *sweatdrops*
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  • From ANON - Ashcat on September 25, 2005
    Ok, so I'm not normally into shota but that was nicely written.. although the wet part i found confusing.. he's not a girl heh.. anyways good job on your first story!
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