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Reviews for ash gets lucky

By : slackerfan
  • From Lyfe on June 27, 2007
    ...Horrible. You suck. You have crappy writing skills. Work harder. Get your mind to work as well. Your fic just sucks as much as all those supposed-to-be good ones. Crap. Terrible. Horrid. Appalling. Need I say more? *holds up magnum to side of self's head, pulls trigger* BANG! *body falls down dead*
    Ghost self: Yoouuuuuuuuuuuu suuuuuuuuuuucccccccckkkkk! Ooooooooooo!
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 19, 2006
    wow
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  • From ANON - CrazyRabidBlonde on September 28, 2006
    Hmmm, what to say? Oh, I know! Two words. YOU. FAIL. 1) The script format makes me want to claw my eyes out. 2) You obviously have no experience writing sexual fanfiction, because the description was just awful. 3) Sex is not just about "Fuck me, fuck me!" It's supposed to be a special union between two people who are in love, not just "Oh, I feel like having sex with you" at some random moment. With some MAJOR work, this could be an enjoyable fanfic, but until you revamp it, please remove it and do not publish anything like it until your writing skills improve.
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  • From ANON - bobaskywalk on July 31, 2006
    Not bad! This may sound strange, but I like they way you you kept it simple with a short introduction and got it done fast. I mean, long stories are good, but sometimes you just want to get to the good part without too much scrolling, you know? Anyway, well written and to the point, I give it a 5!
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  • From ANON - ...... on February 02, 2006
    This is supposed to be a story? How this piece of crap can be called a story is beyond me! The grammar in this is so bad it's like it was written by a 3 year old! Bottom line, this story is gay, just like you!
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  • From ANON - Mr. E on December 21, 2005
    well, it's an ok story, but you need to correct your spelling, and try to describe the scenes a little more.
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  • From ANON - Boom! I Got Your Boyfriend on November 24, 2005
    This fic really needs to be proofread. The grammar leaves much to be desired and there are plenty of typos. The fic itself didn't make much sense, but I can't help but think that if it was written with complete, proper sentences and complete, proper paragraphs it might have.
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  • From ANON - Huh? on November 24, 2005
    What the hell? That wasn't sexy or erotic or naything. Looked more like a badly written troll to me.
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  • From ANON - gamerxtreme on November 12, 2005
    watever
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  • From ANON - mr d on November 02, 2005
    alright this is a flame...and its magnesium so theres no hope of extinguishing it. alright number 1. script style is really bad in fan fics, no one likes it. number 2. explain to me how i ended up in a section of this site where ash gets raped by pokemon...? anyways number 3. do something popular like harry potter or teen titans fan fics, pokeman is a little freaky...4. misty seems a bit anxious to fuck ash...i mean normally virgins are nervous...thats kind of weird
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  • From ANON - RAW19 on October 28, 2005
    unfortunately, i agree with Anon. I wouldn't go so far as to tell you to stop writing stories, i would just ask that you try a little harder in the future. this story had the potential to be good, but 1) the sex was too short, and undetailed, and 2) sex and script format don't usually mix. if you ask the people who run this website, or even a few authors, i'm sure they'ed be happy to give you a few tips.
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 28, 2005
    I want the last 5 mins of my life back. You suck please do not write anymore.
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