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Reviews for a bad fiction

By : Bejino
  • From megamelfina on October 14, 2009
    Well, 'bad' is right.
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  • From Aelan05 on June 23, 2007
    that was.. totally disturbing.
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  • From Shyao on April 07, 2007
    okay, very disturbing. except for the whole murder in the end its not too bad. But you mught want to be consitant with the names. Its not really all that great to mix their english and japanese names. It's best to keep it consistant. Either use Rini like the begining or Chibi-Usa. It's not a bad story I think if you'd expand upon it, it wouldn't be as you put it a bad fiction. It was okay by itself but maybe expand and make it great, how did Beryl get to him? How was he convince that Serena was in danger? How did he get Rini in this position? Why Beryl? She was long dead before Rini ever came into the picture. Maybe have like Tigers eye and Hawks eye be there to help torture her and have their way with her or maybe the wiseman was the one who talked Sammy into this and maybe even watching. Please don't feel this is a flame as I find the story good just needing work to make it even better.
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  • From ANON - Galaxystar on November 23, 2005
    Oh my...

    Disturbing...*cough*

    But not bad, not bad at all...

    Just disturbing...


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  • From ANON - Dark_light18 on November 20, 2005
    Wow! :0( That was good(I guess)!
    What gave you an idea like that to
    have mini moon raped really,really hard?
    well I guess keep writing

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