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By : sasukesanbabe
  • From ANON - angelkitty13 on August 06, 2006
    good job write more

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  • From ANON - Anon on December 17, 2005
    oo ya... n all that shit bout punctuation n wat not comes from ppl 2 stoopid 2 look past it! the story was fine! if they wanna bitch bout that stuff like that, they needa do it sum where else or go make up a story themselves! NE WAYS! again keep up the GREAT werk!!!!!

    **mandi**
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  • From ANON - **mandi** on December 16, 2005
    YAY!!!!! it was good but its not all the way there :( keep it up n im sure EVERY1 will b hooked :p gl!!!!!!!!! hehe

    **mandi**
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 14, 2005
    This needs spell-check, punctuation, paragraphs.

    Get a good betareader who knows the grammar rules.

    Cleaning this up will make it a decent fic.
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  • From ANON - Advisor on December 13, 2005
    One word: Puctuation!!! (as in learn it!)
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  • From ANON - lilphoenixkd on December 12, 2005
    this is great, but it is confusing on telling who's talking. Every time you change speakers you would start another paragraph.
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  • From ANON - Ashcat on December 12, 2005
    Chpt 1: Interesting premise - I've seen a few Shu tries to stop Yuki from smoking.. but not when Shu didn't really want him to from the beginning! Some of your word choices seemed off and the florida key's reference really rang false to me as this is set in Japan and Shu wouldn't get the reference even if Eiri did. I liked the smoking flashback it was pretty funny though I don't know if Eiri would admit to a lack of willpower! Good luck on this fic, I hope you write more soon!
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  • From sasukesanbabe on December 12, 2005
    Good fic are you gonna add more chapters well of course you are but im pretty into it! Carry on my good lady heh
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