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Reviews for Disaster

By : CarrotSlice
  • From ANON - Mandy on August 07, 2006
    Love the story please update real soon can not wait to read what happens next
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  • From ANON - Lawr on January 31, 2006
    Next chaper please. Now!!!!
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  • From ANON - cat on January 29, 2006
    Great story so far! The plot moves along nicely and it's very well written. I hope we find out why this is on Adultfanfiction.net next chapter!


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  • From ANON - Antanaqui on January 27, 2006
    I like the story and how you've been handling it, but I have to make some comments about the tea. First off, hibiscus is one of the most common, botanical, basic teas on the market today. Almost any botanical or citrus tea you pick up with have hibiscus as the main ingrediant. It's know for it's floral dimensions that are also coupled with regular black tea flavors. The plant itself is grown throughout the United States because it can survive in almost any condition. Jasmine, on the other hand, is a bit more rare. If you find jasmine tea in a market, odds are that it has been diluted by some green tea. The only way to get straight jasmine tea in the United States is to make your own or go to an oriental market. Jasmine (and almost any other flower) is an aphrodisiac, with some slight calming effects, but it would take about 20 cups before you truly felt something. The most this combination would do is relax him and clear his head a bit, although it does sound like it would taste good. I know you were probably just trying to put in some detail, but every once in a while somebody like me who studies herbs for whatever reason will come around and correct you, so be more careful next time.
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  • From BlackberryPatch on January 25, 2006
    Nice fic. I usually like more action... ;b But it was a nice change. Intropsection is good too. You have a few typos/spelling errors(ex, I think you spelled "exhausted" eshausted), and you said constellation when I think you meant consolation, but overall good in the grammar department too. An entertaining read- I laughed when D was trying to figure out what to wear. Thanks. =]
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  • From ANON - yellowhorde on January 22, 2006
    I am rather enjoying this story and I don't find it slow or boring at all. It seems rather sweet, tender, and more importantly, REAL. I actually prefer stories with plot over PWP's and if/when Leon and D finally do have sex, it'll mean more than some quick smut fic.
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  • From ANON - calypso on January 21, 2006
    it was good but..........it needs more chapters!
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  • From Lauand on January 14, 2006
    Hi!

    I don't think this story is slow, I like the pace. The PWP fics are not bad, but they tend to be always the same. It's the background that makes a story different and I like the one you're giving to this. The characters are faithful to the manga and the thoughts of both are really credible, understandable and close to what normal people would think and do, and I like that in a fic, that it feels real. So yes, I wouldn't mind reading more chapters of this, not only the smut. If you have some other idea and want to develop it I will be thrilled to read a long story.
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  • From ANON - jazzy on January 08, 2006

    Keep going keep drawing it out, make it a hell of a story if you can. You are doing a pretty good job so far. I love drawn out stuff and besides once you establish the story and get the smut going smut can be added into chapters without any real build up. I don't much care to read smut when it's slapped together before the establishing of the relationship. So I think you are doing a wonderful job.
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  • From ANON - setosgirl (not signed in) on December 24, 2005
    I think you should definitely continue it after the smutfest... make it a real story. ^_^ I like where it's going. Long, drawn-out angst-fess please me no end... Will this be so? Here's hoping!
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  • From ANON - Travellyr on December 20, 2005
    This is a fascinating story- I think you should let it run until it wants to end. ^_^
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  • From Kugatsu on December 16, 2005
    I love this. It's wonderfully writtenand even if you haven't written for a while and are using all the "No-no's" of grammar, don't feel bad. Real writers break those rules allt eh time!

    And and But your heart out and I love contractions!

    I definately want to see more and I usually never review the first time I start reading a new fandom. YOu've got something nice here!
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