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Reviews for Memories Broken

By : learivera
  • From ANON - fallen angel on June 29, 2006
    O.k cool story and all...but isn't yukito a guy in this story...and at the end u say he's pregnant...i don't get it.. Maybe i got it wrong or something but i really thought he was a guy...and i kinda think he said he was pregnant...???? could u care to explain

    All in all it was a really cool story...

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  • From ANON - anonymous on June 22, 2006
    Where the heck is the Mpreg you put in your summary????? The story sucks. There's absolutely no plot!
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  • From ANON - random on January 24, 2006
    I wouldn't say that this is written badly; in fact it's a really good style and technique. The only thing I have to criticize on is the ooc-ness of the characters. I just can't see how some of them can say a certain phrase and such. Sorry, I'm a huge Touya and Yukito/Yue fan and I tend to get critical about their fics. Thanks for writing a TxY fic though. There just aren't enough out ther. ^-^
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  • From ANON - Melody on January 20, 2006
    Oooh, I like this! I'm such a big fan of Touya/Yukito! Midnyte did a good job with the lemon too. I'd like to see more. Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - Midnyte Wolf on January 08, 2006
    Gosh dern it young lady! *sigh* v.v; You had BETTER change what you put in yer profile! You are NOT a horrible writer! Not at all! Don't ever think that way! *throws marshmallows* Is it because of my critique? Look, I'm sorry, okay? I thought I could help make you better! But yer not horrible! There are no bad authors, just bad motivation... Sure you may still insist it's true, but don't let me hear you put yourself down like that. Ever. There are nicer ways of letting yerself know you could use some practice and improvement, not set-back confessions. Now I will physically chang it if I have to ^^; I'm yer mother, I know what's best for you. *pulls out tha' broom* Do as I say! X3

    Okay, now then... ya know, there was something I now noticed about this story that I didn't notice the first time around... the four little words in the summary- PREG... O.O; WTF!? Who's getting pregnant!? With who!? Who is it!? Who's baby!? *faints* That better have been a mistake for MPreg! *panicked* Oh dear... this will not roll over well with WJ... ^^; Oh please don't let what I think will happen actually happen. I just finally got myself into this. XD I hate my possessive emotions sometimes, don't you? Still I always wanna beta for you! It's my pleasure, hun. *lub*

    Can I make a teeny suggestion though I forgot to make earlier? Please ^^; now don't turn tail and run to call yerself a failure kay? Becaue I will bring the happy cage back out. But anyway... I think the chapters could be a smiggin' longer, don't you? And I could use a bit more event in the way of dialogue and stuff... other than thoughts and emotions now. Yeah, that stuff is good too, very good in fact, it's just... I feel like nothing's happening. Which might just be me trying to rush into things. I'm sure you were planning on everything startin' up now that all that beginning stuff is settled, ne? But I just thought I'd bring it up. It kinda feels eventful when they talk more... ^^; Not sure exactly what I mean here, but I'm hoping you get it. Emotions are good, but not as good as a little dialogue to make the events come to life, yes?

    Anyway, great job so far. I'll be anticipating more on the morrow! ...Or whenever you get around to writing some more. XD Ta, poppet! *smooch*
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  • From ANON - Midnyte Wolf on January 05, 2006
    Omae wa ooki na kaijuu da na!? ...But anywayz, I guess I do what I gotta do for the sake of meh dear wittle gurl, ne? Lets get this started;

    For the story in general, I give it an... *mulls* 8 out of 10, possibly. It was darling and simple. Nothing big, nothing elaborate- just straight to the point! Like most of your stories. Not that it's a bad thing. I'm learning how to keep it down too after all ^^;. No need for a hypocritical mother, sou desu ka? Yep, well, anyway- as you remember me speaking and... dear ol' WJ over there, we struggled through this a touch too offensively at first, I must admit. That really wasn't fair of us. Hontou ni gomen nasai. *nodnod*

    I just hope nothing big goes on, nothing interfers and I think we can keep our cool enough to read and review like good citizens! Right WJ?

    WJ: *growls*

    ^^; He said right. Now then- omedetou! We made it! And you're doing a really good job writing wise! *bitter smile* As for the storyline... *thumbs up* Keep it up doll, and I'd love to Beta for you! Just gimme tha' story draft sometime!

    Ja ne! *smooches*
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