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Reviews for Sweetness

By : LucyMay
  • From SilverFox on December 07, 2007
    I liked it. I thought it was very well written. There are a few spelling errors here and there, but they are so few and far between as to be almost unnoticeable. :-) I can't wait to read the sequel.

    But I shall save that for another night :-)




    SilverFox =^.^=
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 20, 2006
    I'd just like to say this again, Hisoka, Tsuzuki, and Miraki are all written in character so well. It's really great to see them be true to themselves, instead of changing to fit the plot. This is rare to find, so treats for you! *hands you Tsuzuki and Hisoka plushies*

    And back to the random reactions!

    Sure Tsuzuki, we know you just forgot to put Hisoka's clothes back on. ^_~

    Aww, they're leaving? I don't want to say goodbye to Hy and Jarret.

    You sly fox, Tsuzuki! Taking dessert back to your room! But he's right, thinking is overrated.

    So the marks are fading, but will they come back again later? Or was this the last time?

    0.0 *blush* Two things to say about the love scene: 1- really hot, 2- very typical of Tsuzuki to use chocolate mousse as lube.

    I like how you've reffered to Hisoka as a man, not a boy. Gives it less of a pedophile vibe. ^_^ Actually, it just shows how much Hisoka has grown. Another thing I like about this piece.

    Hisoka as a "blushing vixen." I like that image too.

    Aw, I love the ending! . . . a sequal? *squee of joy* I'm very tempted to pounce on you now. Yay! I feel like I should wrap this up somehow, but I don't know how. So I'll say, Sweetness is a wonderful piece that you should be really proud of! Your writing is amazing, and you've stayed true to the characters.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 20, 2006
    So, I'm writing this as I read, so pardon the randomness of this review. ^_^

    Ooooh, Hy is very insightful: "Because he's a coward, hiding behind someone you love to get to you." That's a point I haven't heard before. It makes a lot of sense.

    Go fortune teller! I could hug her right now, giving Tsuzuki that tip!

    The taxi cab driver is pretty trusting. Most people would've tossed Tsuzuki out of the car. I like the observation of Muraki being a calm driver, despite being a psychotic murderer.

    Is the damage he's talking about from Hurricane Katrina? Wow, I didn't think I'd ever see a real-life parallel in a fanfic. . . I like it!

    Wait. . . Cassandra is 60 years old? How long has Muraki kept her like that? I'm confused here. . . So she's not dead? Well, wasn't until Muraki killed her?

    This is an interesting dynamic, with Muraki saying he's already claimed Hisoka.

    "'I belong to him, not the other way around,' Tsuzuki said." I really liked this line!

    Woah! Hand coming out of the floor! Creepy. >.< Good effect though.

    Wow, I really want to see where this is going. *reads on*
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2006
    Hello! I haven't gotten to review yet, so this is 6 chapters worth smushed together. ^_^ I really like this story. The interactions between Tsuzuki and Hisoka are sweet but also realistic. I could see the same things happening in the manga. The mystery part of the storyline is realistic too. Normally I don't like mysteries, but this one has a good pace. I did wonder, when the marks appeared on Hisoka, if they would've appeared if it was someone else other than Tsuzuki with Hisoka, but that's just me wondering. *grin* It''s great that Muraki can have such a presence in this story, but he isn't even seen until the end of this chapter. I liked Hy and his partner. They're well developed and really add to the story. I particularly liked Hy's version of him being eaten by an alligator and the one-sided conversations he has with his partner. The other minor characters are written well too, such as the fortune teller and the old woman who were questioned. The old man who was dying made me sad though. I liked Tsuzuki's compassion there. And the iced tea lick in the beginning of chapter 6!

    Ah! Hisoka's gone? >.< No Muraki, you can't have him!
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  • From ANON - cocoke5 on June 16, 2006
    i love the story and i can not wait for more chapter of the story and see if dr muki come back and get them you did a good job and keep it up .
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  • From KlebKat on June 10, 2006
    My answer to this whole fic >> XD

    I actually liked your original characters, though I would have liked to seen a more defendant conclusion (aka why) Muraki was killing and then sewing up their mouths. My assumption was that they saw things (like Hisoka) that they weren’t suppose to, thus he killed them and then sewed up their mouths to keep them from telling, even in death.

    XD as a last note, I feel that Muraki was so well in character, that I’m going to give you cookies! *hands over a batch of home made chocolate chip cookies* and having the story set in New Orleans. Very nice.

    Write more, okay?
    Kleb
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  • From ANON - lily on June 09, 2006
    I read this over at fanfiction.net and I couldn't resist but read it again over here. I like how you wrote this story, it really was sweet and the love scene was fantastic.
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