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Reviews for Young Girl

By : Kryptonex
  • From haruharaharu on February 04, 2008
    One of my favorites here in the LH section. I enjoyed the dream sequence in chapter 2 very much, although the short fantasy scenes in the first chapter were great as well. It would be awesome if these two chapters were to become the jump-pad from which to create a more realized sexual relationship between Keitaro and Shinobu. I definitely enjoy seeing her in stories.

    I did wish that the sex scene in chapter two were a little more densely written. A lot happened, but you swept over them a bit quickly, and I would've liked some more descriptions to help put the reader in the scene.
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  • From Mangafreak on February 19, 2007
    not bad. not bad at all.
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  • From ANON - Bakaman on January 04, 2007
    hm I like where this is going ^^ You are much better than you think . I strongly believe that you have quite a future here in AFF and I'll anxiously wait for your next chapter . Keep this up , you just got a new fan ;)
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  • From ANON - Keit on December 18, 2006
    Nice story, very well done and hot.. mmmm. I look forward to further chapters! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Saico on November 24, 2006
    Thanks for this! There are too few Keitaro/Shinobu in here.
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  • From Bishonen on November 24, 2006
    Oh wow that was hot I have always loved Shinobu but I love motoko even more but this story is great hope for an update really soon

    With love;Imasuky Lomae
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  • From ANON - BigFics on November 22, 2006
    CONTINUE THIS FANFIC!!!!!! I beg you! have it end up with Shinobu and keitaro actually doing it!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!
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  • From ANON - @_@ on November 20, 2006
    love it, hope you update soon
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 19, 2006
    Great fic. It's always good to see a new author.
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  • From ANON - wein6 on November 18, 2006
    nice, very nice.
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  • From ANON - RAW19 on November 18, 2006
    excellent. update soon!
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  • From ANON - RAW19 on November 14, 2006
    excellent start. i hope you update soon!
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  • From Bishonen on November 14, 2006
    Oh that was hot and good a bit short hope for more soon you have a way with words even if this was your frist thing posted it was nicely done

    With Love; Imasuky Lomae
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