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Reviews for Strings

By : Kainonis
  • From JLucPitard on April 19, 2007
    As always, I love your work... but now I have to go wash my eyes out with bleach. *squicked*
    I like the sense of disconnect and out of body experience that you describe. Your first few sentences would be more powerful if they were edited slightly. The second one "He screams as he feels himself cut, but he is held down and he cannot escape." makes the next one "He wanted this, he’d asked, but now he’s not so sure." seem almost humorous. Now he's not so sure? I think you can be a bit stronger with that third sentence and it will help set the tone for the piece. (like "now he wants to tell them to go to hell, but his screams remain incoherent." or something) Otherwise it's well written... but still squicky for me.
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  • From DreadfulPenny on April 18, 2007
    Gorgeous, Noa. Simply gorgeous. I love your description of the change and Walter's mental state.
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  • From eeriansadowthefallen on April 18, 2007
    jesus, noa, that's dark. and a little bent.



    and strangely erotic.


    dammit how do you lure me into reading these pairing that i wouldn't normally touch with a ten foot pole?
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