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Reviews for The Traitor's Legacy

By : Trueblackfire
  • From Trueblackfire on October 22, 2007
    Moshe, thank you for the review. yes i have cosidered several write ups but I think I'm going to instead is give my idea of the follow up to an author on fanfiction(dot)net and see where he or she can take it. I was consious on doing the abuse ayeka endured and certinely the time speant as I didn't want it to line on peverse. Also, i considered the tenchi marries them and helps them option but it wouldn't convince the reader that marrying or seeing tenchi alone would wash away 70yrs of abuse and as you noted in the end, just Zetkral destried ayeka, he has also destroyed sasami of her innocence and transformed her into something much worse. Those are issues that cannot be put aside lightly.
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  • From moshe2 on October 21, 2007
    I am impressed with your story, it is quite an interesting read! I was quite surprised, at the end, when Sasami showed up, and gutted the traitor, but, it was a truly fitting end to a traitor annd despot! The only thing the story lacked (IMHO), was Tenchi being involved somehow (in a positive way). It would be most fitting if you were to write a follow-on story, where Ayeka & Sasami somehow find Ryoko, and search for Tenchi & rescue him! Then they all confess their love for Tenchi, he accepts them all as his wives, then they free Jurai from the the Alien's slavery! How about considering such a story?? I'd like to hear from you reference such a story! But, that is one heck of a good story you have written!!!!!

    Moshe
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