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Reviews for Tear You Apart

By : Duomi
  • From Hellagoddess on March 18, 2008
    Loved the interaction between L and Kira (that snotty brat!) Near wasn't as irritating as normal, possibly down to teh fact that he seemed shoved in as an afterthought at the end of the chapter (which suited me just fiiiiine. Can't wait to see what happens!

    Sorry for the short review - I'm not feeling my super special awesome self today :S *hugs Kira plushy, looks to the side and covertly makes it kiss L plushy*
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  • From Zannie on March 18, 2008
    Wow, I cannot believe how fast you write. Makes me feel guilty for not finishing my trilogy of Light and L goodness or starting the misaxmatsuda goodness I promised people. Now there's an under rated pairing. The really awful thing is I have the draft on my laptop. Are you the writer for shades of mystications as well? Wow, if so I feel super guilty. Thanks for answering my review before. I hope you (if you're the same author) will write more on shades of mystication cause that is still my current fav fanfic. Can there be more dream scenes? I like Light and Kira fighting for control. Maybe they can do while awake as well? Total clash of the titians, I can almost imagine them fighting each other phsically, pulling hair and ripping their own clothes till they are half naked, and then L steps in... hehe

    well, Ooodles and Noodles

    Zannie
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  • From Dotowe on March 18, 2008
    Cool. Again, I like the idea of Kira battling Light in his dreams. It's...and going back to the "Death Note effects Light's sanity thing", it's making it seem entirely plausible that Light always had the potential to have a split personality, and that the Death Note served as a way to push him over the edge. Also, interesting thing that I noticed in this chapter, was the idea that the longer Kira is away from the Death Note, the less...I don't know. It's like Kira is more perceptible to Light's interaction and his attraction to L. It's almost like Kira and Light are becoming a single being again and the absence of the Death Note is making that possible.

    I noticed that you mentioned feeling a little shaky about Mello's character. Personally, I think you did a fine job of writing him and Matt, and especially Near, in the last chapter. And you also mentioned that you ordered the Los Angeles B.B. Murder Cases on-line. I can almost garuntee that you will have a very clear idea of how to write a "grown-up" Mello after reading the book, as it is written by Mello and you have a dozen chapters or so with Mello's narration. In the introduction, when Mello finally gets around to introducing who he is, he says something to the effect of "My name is Mello; the best dressed asshole who ever died like a dog." So I'm excited that you're going to hop into that. That being said, the reason why I think you did a fine job with mello last chapter is because Mello is still technically a child, right? And so, he still has that self-possessed immaturity to go hand in hand with his bratty, "I'm the main character" personality. So, well done. Don't sweat it too much.

    And, yes, Aizawa. *sigh* Truth be told: I really didn't care for him much at first; and it was for the sole, shallow reason that I couldn't wrap my head around his hair. But then, when he gets exasperated and rips his pants off to get into the building in that one episode, I was so amused that I began paying closer attention to him. Later, when he quits the team and tells L how much he despises him, and L remarks quietly that he always liked him and Aizawa pauses, I knew, without a doubt, that Aizawa was a jewel. For L to be compelled to give that last remark--and I really did believe L; I think L really does respect Aizawa--and for it to strike a chord in Aizawa and then for him to later become a key player, was just phenomenal to me. And I am excited that we'll see more of him in furthur chapters.

    Ha ha, and I loved the fact that Kira hated Italy for the sole reason of not being fluent in Italian. That made me giggle.

    I am on the edge of my seat for the next chapter!

    Joie,
    Gloria

    P.S. I think I fell in love with Near in this chapter. He completely stared the President of the US of A down without even having to look at him!
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  • From ANON - Zannie on March 18, 2008
    COOL! A sequel. But wouldn't it have been easier to just add on more chapters to Goodnight Moon? (Love that song btw) Matt seems a bit out of character, its just he's more of a smartass in the manga and anime. Oh, but don't get me wrong it is a brilliant start and I can't wait to see more Light and L. Is there going to be anymore pairings?
    Well, please continue with this fic.

    Ooodles and Noodles

    Zannie
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  • From GreatestHits on March 17, 2008
    YAY!!! I'm so glad you're writing a sequel to Goodnight Moon, and with Mello and Matt in it to boot! This is the ultimate. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. :D
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  • From Hellagoddess on March 17, 2008
    Oh nicely done on posting so fast! *casually looks around for L, quickly hands cookie from hidden box*

    For some insane reason I liked Mello in this. Normally I can't stand the little twerp and Near makes me want to hit him with a rubber bat that's not made of rubber but is instead made up of a giant demon monster that will eat his soul and then devour his still twitching corpse.

    >.>

    Man...shush. It's like really late and I've just updated - this nervous energy has to go somewhere!

    But yeah, good to see it's up so quickly! I like that Matt is the voice of reason and i absolutely LOVED his analogy of Mello suddenly being the main character and all that - it made me want to copy/paste it to read later to make me laugh. Look forward to more!

    OMGWTF Where's my COOKIES?!
    -points to Duomi and flees-

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  • From ANON - Kira Douji on March 17, 2008
    Other than to dryly point out that my name is rather ironic at this point, it's 5am and my mind is broken (heh, that's the way I finished the manga too? :P) so this is just in place to say "I'm coming back, and I'm bringing a wall of text" ... once I get some sleep >

    - Kira
    ... (lol)
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  • From RivenLiether on March 17, 2008
    Oh no, this worked out great. Perfect introduction to a new phase of the tale. Good work, and great characterization again! ^^ I can't tell you how pleased I am that it's not over, really, lol.
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  • From SailorAurora on March 17, 2008
    I'm Glad if my review was able to help you out. ^^;;

    Anyway, very interested in what's going to happen in your stories as usual. keep up the usual good work!

    And, if you ever have the time I'd like you to review my Death Note Fan-fiction "Rise and fall of Kira", and point out any flaws it might have. I'm not the best writer in the world, but even then I try to do my best but honest reviews helps a lot in that regards. :)
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  • From Dotowe on March 16, 2008




    Lol, I just finished reviewing Goodnight Moon when I realized that you had posted the first chapter of the sequel. I'm sooooo excited. And am thrilled that you're playing with Matt! Cannot wait for the next chapter!

    Joie,
    Gloria
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  • From shidoburrito on March 16, 2008
    Oh wonderful! I'm so glad you made the sequel. I loved Goodnight Moon and didn't want it to end just yet. Not that I'm a lustful horndog or anything (well, maybe just a bit), can we expect any more LxLight scenes? Whatever your plan, I can't wait to read more!
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