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Reviews for Hypothermia

By : ArchangelM127
  • From JohnSlayer on May 15, 2010
    TOTALLY AWESOME Start!!!
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  • From ANON - Velshard on January 28, 2009
    A very tasteful first chapter, exactly what I myself would have done since I know from experience that pity sex is never good for the mental health of someone in asevere depression, So as I said a very tasteful and excellent fic so far.
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 16, 2008
    Hmm...

    If memory serves, even on her way to the otherside, Shirly had accepted Lelouch.

    See no reason to change that.
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  • From ANON - Ichallenge on September 15, 2008
    First off, I have to say that I'd write my own ending if I could, due to my lack of writing talent I will not. So here's my idea: I present my idea and see if anyone uses it. Here:
    Shirley wants to forgive Lulu but can't. She cries over her suffering, and takes the gun (pointing at Zero, shaking due to her suffering.) and Lulu -due to his love for her- uses his Geass on her making her forget everything that happened between them (sex, becoming lovers, etc. Not exactly like when he uses Geass on her in the anime.) the newt day, the two start over with Lulu doing what he can to get in such a relationship with her and keep her happy. Something like that.

    Now to Animefreak859: you mention the CCXLulu fic right. But I can't give any ideas without knowing how far the Eng dub of the anime is. Tell me, and I'll try to give ideas.
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  • From BlackKnight on September 05, 2008
    Exellent job on this chapter, I really liked it, although 'a philosophical and moral discussion' it was well-done,
    and I totally agree with you on the "Fanservice for it's own sake" part, something sunrise doesn't seem to realize sometimes,
    "he's telling the honest truth when he says he would kill her." yes certainly , he would do that.

    * Those two knights look serious and capable, I doubt one of Kallen's original resistance cell would behave that way.
    * Does the number 817 have any significance that I'm missing ? I can't help but feel you put some meaning behind it.
    * "Here was a leader. Here was a man born to command", yes indeed...
    * "Zero hadn’t even tried to apologize for it", maybe her Lulu would, but Zero definitely wouldn't ever.
    * "Lulu is Zero. Zero killed Dad" , maybe if you added "Lulu killed dad" at the end it would look more like the type of thought that would make her faint, though that would contradict with her seeing 'Lulu' and 'Zero' as different entities.

    * If I were ZeroLelouch I would stay away from the window to make sure nobody gets a glance of my face, obviously he doesn't think so.

    * "We had to kill them all." Not a trace of remorse on his face" , I wouldn't expect one.

    * "This entire conflict is a giant game of chess, played between many sides on a multi-dimensional board" , I really like the concept, maybe I can create a multidimensional chess ? quite a nice idea.

    * "You have six options" , I'm not sure I see 6 options , the first is to kill him, the second is to leave, the third is to join him, the fourth is to go back to her life after giving her word, maybe "I can also use it to modify your memory to whatever extent you wish" is the fifth ?


    As much as I would like to see this continued, I believe your choice of labeling it 'Complete' is the best choice to make as long as you have no more ideas, much better than leaving the story with the "on hiatus" status.
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  • From RyokoChan on August 16, 2008
    My mind automatically went to the console her with sex scenario. It makes it so obvious that these two should do it; but at the same time, Lelouch really isn’t the type to take advantage of a girl like that (Light Yagami, yeah but not Lelouch). LuLu isn’t estrange and a mental case like Light. It’s nice that they just got together and didn’t just fall into the sack. Very refreshing. Please keep it up and maybe continue?
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  • From ANON - Sven Dular on July 24, 2008
    Wow...I was thinking that same thing too when I saw it. I'm glad someone had the same idea.
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  • From ANON - Crimson Omen on July 22, 2008
    Well you were true to your word, you don't need a lemon to make a story interesting. I enjoy writers like you who have so much talent and know how to keep things from becoming to predictable. It would create a strong sense of nostalgia for me if you were to write more stories.
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