Reviews for Thanks for the Memories

BY : Duomi

  • From ANON - kareen on August 18, 2009


    so, this story is really...interesting i would say. the only thing that throwa me off is how smart they already are for a young age. well actually, jsut near. bc to me L seems like a childish person, and if near is close to L, then near seems like a childish person(and im not even hinting at his toys) Mello was the only one out of the three that seemd to actualy be a normal person, but..not. lol that doesnt make sense. whatevs. i guess youre allwoed to make it as such seeing as there have been countless times where i have wondered myself what L would have been like as a child. hmmm..

    other than that though, its really cool to see somethin like this. i hope it isnt finsihed?i only skimmed over the AN (knowing me*rolls eyes*)

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  • From Gloria B on February 01, 2009

    Again, I find Near's first memory shocking and well-described. It feels so heartbreakingly real that Near would take so long to compute that the thing he stared at was an arm, and that it would be his first recollection because how impossible would that be to forget? I also love the notion that Near's obsession with puzzle pieces has more than one dimension. You talk about how Near puts the puzzles together upside-down because this way there's no 'distracting' image to 'contend' with, and then you also go on to use this element as a way to potray this charqacter reconstructing a memory! So clever and inuitive. We get a lot of really good things here, right off the bat. Near remembering something painful, and him doing it in a very Near-esque way, a quirk we are familiar with from the canon.

    In the first diary notation, you go on to describe, and explain, why Near doesn't bother looking at people. I adore this segment because it makes such perfect sense. It reminds me of a Japanese film I saw once where the Japanese actor went to America and his longlost..son? maybe, or some young relative is in a gang and he and his gang members are explaining something to him, and the Japanese man is staring at the door just to the right of them, and then at their feet, and then at their hands, while they're talking. It was explained to me later that this is common in Japanese culture, that staring at a person's face is not only sometimes considered rude, but also futile, as paying attention to the external is more important to understanding what a person is saying, and also gives the listener the opportunity to be more aware of what is going on in the context of the conversation: Who else is listening? Are they nervous? What are their hands doing? Are they lying to me? Where's the exit?

    Again, I think that your use of K in this chapter is fresh. It brings a breathable element into what could have a very heady introductory chapter to Near's adolescence. It was great fun to read K and Dr. R's dialogue, and to later understand that it was all a plot crafted by Near to become acquainted with K, and to understand better if K's proposition was worth Near's time.

    Ha ha. Love that Near logically deduces that being ignored is better than being changed or pushed down in the hall. Such a detached way of describing a very uncomfortable situation that would have any other child crying in frustration.

    Near's version of packing is hilarious.

    I love that he ntoices Mello and Beyond immediately because they don't have the monotonous 'sameness' of the other orphans. I also like that Near relates to B as having thoughts that are 'barely human'.

    It hurts to read that again, when Near curled up against K and shut down completely. She kinda deserved it though. She was being pretentious and pushy. Poor dear.

    "Your command needs more concise parameters." ROFL

    Breaks my heart that Near considers himself a copy because because of why Wammy gave him the name 'Near'. No wonder Near would become interested in the idea of recording his individual existence. I also find it interesting that Near wonders if he'll become like B. Its kind of a funny twist, isn't it? N reminds W of L, so he calls him Near. B is for Backup, and B wants to be like L, so he changes his appearance. N doesn't think he'll ever want to mimic L, but believes he already comes that way by default. But N also thinks he might become a little...insane like B, and wouldn't, and/or couldn't possibly belong anywhere else.

    Its also a little sad that Near decides to keep a diary because of this; that he wants to interrogate his own thoughts and watch for clues in case he becomes unstable.

    Enthralling! Can't wait to see what you cook up next!


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  • From Riam the Wanderer on January 15, 2009

    I love it, simply love it. No other story has given so much in depth information on the Wammy boys, hell most forget B was a Wammy boy. I can't wait to read more about all of them, and how everything falls into place. It is brilliant!

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  • From ANON - SP777 on November 01, 2008

    Well, for what it's worth, you got yourself an INTRIGUING piece of work here, the
    part on Mello is going to be interesting to read.

    I can't wait to see how you would do Near, Lord knows that child is the definition
    of enigma. Look under the picture and you'll see his face. :-)

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