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By : ArchangelM127
  • From ANON - StrikeFreedomX on October 08, 2011
    a great fic :D, really sad about lelouch outliving Kallen, I'd hate to have something like that happen, to watch people age while u do not and then eventually die :(
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  • From Mic123 on October 15, 2010
    I loved it
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  • From ANON - jojomaster on February 02, 2010
    Truly an exceptioinal read. Lacked a bit of body, but in it's conciseness was still a pleasure. The ending was rather pleasing and insightful, though I don't think Nunnally was mentioned and I was curious about her status in the last two chapters. Lemon Content that is integrative to the story is rare and good stuff.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2010
    A nice ending to a nice story. Also nice to see a story that isn't complete smutt from time to time.
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  • From ANON - No-one on September 28, 2009
    ...y'know. I never expected an AFF story to contain moments of such tenderness that they'd bring tears to my eyes. You're a very good writer.
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  • From ANON - althariel on August 11, 2009
    when I started reading this story I wasn't very crushed with the ruru/kallen... but now I am... It was beautiful and some kind of hard because you really followed the original story which is weird in a fanfiker... great story, kind of sad but beautiful end... i enjoyed it
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  • From ANON - All That Is Left Unsaid on July 25, 2009
    Apologies for the delay in the review.

    There's not much else I can add beyond what I said on the draft, but I definately like that Lelouch is still able to telepathically speak with Kallen. The alternative of Lelouch being completely isolated from her for eternity was just too depressing for me.

    Does he really plan to live until the sun explodes, or might he have continued to study the Kamine ruins at leisure over the years to find a way to make the World of C destroy his Code as well? Would he periodically visit the ruins to have more "physical" reunions with Kallen, or speak with the rest of his family once they died?
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  • From ANON - klv__klv on July 18, 2009
    Love the ending. Lelouch as an immortal... He could definitely pull it off. And you had me racking my brains trying to figure out how you could bring him back to life after he so undeniably died at the hands of Suzaku. He was bound and determined to die in this manner, so he would never have weasled his way out intentionally. And as a writer you would never sully the nature and character of a character, I hope, no pun intended, as I have never observed any such sin in your writing up to this point (for which you have my respect). C.C.'s outside, unexpected intervention could have occurred, given her nature, and Lelouch would not have been able to counter it. I ignore any 'solid' limitations, such as inability to do such and such, because the only sacred thing when it comes to writing fanfiction is the integrity of the charaters' natures. You somehow managed to find a way to save him, when I never thought it could happen. I am impressed.

    And did I just read correctly? Original writings? This is exciting. I shall look for them!

    Enough rant. I like your story.
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  • From thegreeneagle on July 18, 2009
    A fantastic conclusion, IMO. Excellent writing and capturing the essence of the characters in this slightly alternate universe you created.
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  • From ANON - OREZ on July 04, 2009
    Kallen is BAKA. Don't kill Lelouch, please !!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Shard on July 04, 2009
    Very nice work

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  • From AviarisSevanthis on July 03, 2009
    I love this story! It's awesome, and I love the pairing. Always have. And by the way, that little trick you pulled with the phrase “Sore wa himitsu desu” was really rather clever. Kudos to you.
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  • From ANON - All That Is Left Unsaid on July 03, 2009
    Nice chapter overall, I particularly liked the last part when Kallen broke "the news" to Lelouch, their farewell comments, and the theme you've used with silence.

    That said I do have a few critiques. First, Suzaku won't be able to hold back on Kallen. I mean this literally. When he goes "Live On" mode he is forced to fight at 110% and kill anything in his way or be killed by it. In truth, Lelouch organized the battle in the series for the express purpose of trying to make sure Suzaku never had to face Kallen (keeping them on opposite sides of the field, etc.), their final confrontation was actually never supposed to happen from Lelouch's strategic standpoint. For the writers...yes, it was inevitable. If you are having problems with the epilogue, then perhaps you could mention that Lelouch took steps to reorganize the battle setup this way after learning of his impending fatherhood.

    Second, Kallen's response "Then I don’t love you anymore," leaves a really really bad taste in my mouth, as it comes across as b**chy, and just too abrupt. I'd suggest something to the effect of her asking just what is so important, but Lelouch has to stay secretive, as he's convinced she'd stop it or expose his martyr plan to others. Kallen can then take this as him desiring power, not trully being open with her, or whatever would best lead back into the rest of the story. Her "Then the man I love is dead afterall," line however, works perfectly for tone, her understanding of events, and progress in the conversation.

    Lastly, accepting a Code is the only way to lose one's Geass, short of Lelouch having his eyes removed.

    As for their daughter's appearance, I've mentioned that I'd hope she has her mother's hair color, and I'd like to add the idea of having her mothers spikey hairstyle as well. I was recalling the picture in Kallen's room with her, Naoto, and her mother when Kallen looked to be 8 and she just looked adorable.
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  • From thegreeneagle on July 02, 2009
    Fantastic character play, IMO. In the later chapters, I really think this truly captures the conflict within the characters. I wish it didn't have to end, but the storyline is close to the finale. Fantastic all around! Keep up the writing as much as possible!
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  • From Platinumsabr on July 02, 2009
    Well, again, I have to say I'm flattered. Getting a chapter dedicated to you is certainly an ego boost. Now, on to the chapter. I don't know, it was very well written, but I'd think it would have gone a bit differently since he and Kallen were so close before the "betrayal" wouldn't you? That's really all I have to say. But, on another note, my input on the daughter is she HAS to have Lelouch's hair and eyes. If it was a boy I'd go with Kallen's genetics, but as we all know it was almost like Lelouch was made as a female character in the first place. (I mean really, those guys are all freaking skinny, unnaturally so.) She'd look much more attractive with her father's traits than her mother's. Man, I can see her grin now...freaky.

    Keep up the good work! Can't wait to see what happens next!
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