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Reviews for Burning Heart

By : BeefJerkyYo
  • From Raelax12222 on January 15, 2010
    All i gotta say man or woman is *thumbs up*
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  • From Raelax12222 on January 09, 2010
    im impressed :) i loved the story so far and id love to see more written i have a feeling you can defiantly go further with it
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  • From OmegaX on November 20, 2009
    Damn, just damn.

    I do wonder how this is going to affect Shinji and Asuka's relationship in the long run, simply because we all know Asuka would probably get worked up over and jealous over the events.

    As for later chapters, as I mentioned, perhaps a scene after school with the two, or something more emotional elsewhere. Either way, I'd love to see the A/S relationship grow closer, as it already had in 2 and 3.
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  • From ponderguy on October 24, 2009
    PLEASE do another chapter with misato involved! I just stumbled across your stories, thanks to your hermione story. I loved both stories and I can't wait to see whats next. I love the details you go into keep it up
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  • From MrNobody on August 10, 2009
    Hi. I wouldnt mind seeing some serious stuff like enemas, milking, candle play, bondage or possibly even futa. *blushes severely*
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  • From OmegaX on August 10, 2009
    Sadly, I never got around to reviewing the first chapter (It was released when I had company over, and after rebooting my laptop that night, I forgot about the link...) but I'm more than willing to review part 2!

    Needless to say, I loved it! I'm hoping Asuka and Shinji's sessions with their Plug suits don't end there, heheh.

    As for wants for later chapters, Asuka's already starting to become more and more of a pervert, and Shinji's spine is growing back, so the more, the better, heh. As for scenes themselves, why can I see Asuka goading Hikari into giving her and Shinji "cleanup" duty one day, and Asuka takes it to the natural extreme. After all, Shinji must have some form of fantasy involving her in her uniform.....
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  • From Rommel on August 10, 2009
    Again, this has promise but the paragraphing is just awful. I loved the plugsuits, so I think it'd be a shame to let this go to waste. I suggest signing up at the writer's forum in lemontastica. Trust me, you'll get lots of help there. Check it out http://forums.lemontastica.org/index.php
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  • From SuperMutant on August 08, 2009
    That was pretty fun. I thought that Asuka's malicious side made your story more unique. In a lot of other stories she turns into a wilting flower once she and Shinji get together.
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  • From Raelax12222 on August 08, 2009
    heh this was a well written story i only noticed a few double words but removed em in my head haha though i gotta say id love to see a continuation of this story and so would my roommate after him screaming it at me that he wanted to know where the second part to the story was anyway great write and i hope to see more soon. :D
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  • From Rommel on August 07, 2009
    I don't generally do reviews, but you seem to have potential enough that someone has to say this: break up your paragraphs. Specially, when people are talking. Not only is it impossible to tell who's saying what, but it's so annoying that it will probably keep people from reading altogether.
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