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Reviews for Northern Star

By : osirisavenger
  • From ANON - Raize of Darkness on October 28, 2010
    I don't get why you have so few views. If anything your story (while deathly hard to follow at times) can be seen a a counterpoint/complament to Sinners done by Slash Firestorm. I would almost call this the dark story to his light story. Please try to update again soon, as I enjoy reading yours work .
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  • From Forevergamer on June 06, 2010
    I can understand the slow updates. I myself am working on several chapters/arcs of a story i started YEARS ago. not that i have been able to finish a single chapter on paper, much less on my laptop.

    You have a great Idea with this story, It almost falls under the same ganere that i like to think about. If you ever need someone to headbutt ideas with look me up. maybe we can convince your muse to help out?
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  • From the42jabberwocky on March 08, 2010
    All right, short fist chapter, but it nailed everything that was required to pull me in. You threw me for a loop when the theory of humans being the alien species, I was expecting the Pokemon to be theorized as aliens. I Like where this could go and I am very intrigued. To be honest I don't see why you belittle your work, but maybe I'll see why later. I will say this, I want to read more, and I like the story. My only problem was the big scientific words...I have no idea what they are...but that is just me. It comes from not bothering to educate myself on biological terms. I am a kid in that respect...to lazy to look up proper names and scientific babbling to throw into my story for effect.

    Expect more comments from me at some point...I will continue...but as I said to others such as yourself...I'm a bit self centered and want to focus on my own work. Overall, good first chappy, will continue onwards.
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  • From ANON - Psy on February 06, 2010
    Psy here, somethings up with AFF, logged me out for some reason. Anyway, on with the review.

    "These guys have faggy little tiaras..."
    D'OH!


    "I've waited for this since the day I met you. Please make love to me."
    ...I unno...That seems pushing it. It just seems odd to have something like "Hi, I'm Dominic", "Hi I'm Minerva (I want to fuck this guy)"


    Where a connection between lover's hearts should have been, there was a foul link between twin black storms of pain and fear and powerful, all-consuming hate, with each one feeding the other.
    ...What. Emo Emo Emo Life is pain /wrists
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  • From puffball64 on February 04, 2010
    Well, that was interesting. Rough sex was never my thing, but I loved the way you presented it before, during, and after.

    Keep up the story.

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  • From on January 20, 2010
    Those damn Solon, always stealing the show. Interested in seeing how Mewtwo plays out with this.
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  • From puffball64 on January 18, 2010
    Interesting...

    Well, carry on. I want to see how he interacts with the new planet.

    @Skyler: It tends to happen pretty often. No one can blame you for assuming so. This place gets dead in terms of updates for awhile, then everyone happens to update again at the same time, more or less.

    It's hilariously absurd.
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  • From ANON - Raine on January 17, 2010
    So far so good. However, this totally wreaks of 40k... and the smell is getting worse, Ausare.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 16, 2010
    "The drop ship New Moon"
    I see what you did there.
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  • From on January 13, 2010
    I guess he landed in Lake Verity and scared Dawn out of her wits? Any particular reason they dropped into Sinnoh?

    Sensory radial, I like that term.

    And sorry for grabbing the top of the section list so fast. I hadn't checked the site all day and I just assumed no one added anything...as usual...
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  • From on December 06, 2009
    Now let's have none of this business about you sucking in terms of word count. Never judge yourself by the standards of others; you will either fall short of them or exceed them so embarrassingly that the comparison will be meaningless.

    What I'm trying to say is that we all write differently, and every story, whether of the debilitating length of Equilibrium or the succinctness of Northern Star, makes the lives of their readers infinitely more rich than they would be had the stories not existed at all.
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  • From puffball64 on November 25, 2009
    I'm lovin' this. I like the character summaries and whatnot at the end too. Gives a good idea and wraps up the going ons during. Tasty.
    Write more soon.
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  • From on November 22, 2009
    "Cypress made some phone calls to some cousins from the old country, and the man had vanished without a trace."

    I had to stop reading for a moment, I was laughing so hard. Now in my mind he looks like Marlon Brando in The Godfather.

    Seriously, good to see some activity in an otherwise dead section. Most of the regular updaters have slumped off, it seems. Working on Equilibrium here, but I may have to write two chapters to one-up your intended one-upsmanship...
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  • From on September 16, 2009
    Bring on the power-armored space marines!

    Oh, and whatever else is in chapter 5. mostly excited about the space marines, though.
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  • From NonaSuomi on September 13, 2009
    Well this is... Pretty awesome, I must admit. I didn't know what to think after the second chapter, but I really want to see how the two worlds interact when Northern Star gets there.

    I still can't shake the 40k vibe that the whole thing gives off though, and I love it all the more for it. Wouldn't that be quite the crossover!

    As for the story in the pokemon world so far, well it seems pretty well done so far, but I think your real innovation is the extraterrestrial bit; no offense, but I haven't seen a whole lot of groundbreaking stuff there yet, although the genetic similarity thing sets it all up quite nicely.

    Definitely a story I'll keep an eye on!
    --NonaS

    PS- thanks to Skyler for the link. I hate Google for blacklisting AFF... (Or is it that AFF has the whole site tagged with no-bot tags or a robots.txt?)
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