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By : unknownmercury
  • From ANON - Anon on March 20, 2011
    I just wanted to give you a heads-up that your last chapter posted as a wall of words. You might want to consult the following topic on our forum for ways to fix this: http://www2.adultfanfiction.net/forum/index.php/topic/19921-problems-with-the-rich-text-editor/
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  • From SkySan27 on March 13, 2011
    Part of this was done in a way that it seems you're writing a play by scene script for a play or show. I don't think you needed to press enter so much between sentences. Having paragraphs is actually rather nice really because in my eyes it seems to give a fluid motion to what you're reading. This is more like a telegram.

    Ball was thrown. Stop

    Pokemon was captured. Stop

    You honestly don't need to use the enter so much. You also should try to go for more words, give a good seven to eight paragraphs if you can, anything above four. The reason why I think so many paragraphs matter is because it gives readers something to read and enjoy, plus it gives you a lot of room to write and draw in the reader, making them want to come back.
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