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Reviews for Aliza's story

By : Starprincesssnow
  • From Raholea on July 27, 2011
    Hey! I've been following this over the last couple updates, and had to dish my bit. I like this story, the plot is decent enough although overall your writing could use a little more work. mostly i suggest a lot of practice and there's plenty of writing tips out there if you look for them. Your local library or bokstore will direct you, along with various places online.

    On a non- writing note, i noticed use of "Molitic". Feebas' evolution is spelled "Milotic" , a simple swapping of the 'o' and 'i'. This may help you a bit. All pokemon can be found online with their move charts. Take it from a poke-nerd, it can get confusing if pokemon are using moves that aren't typically within their capabilty/ type allotment. not trying to complain, just provide a little help.

    Thanks for writing and posting this story. I shall be looking forward to updates.
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