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Reviews for Plasma's Bride

By : Temerity
  • From GuyForFun on October 24, 2011
    This is really great so far. I'm not usually into male pokemon on female girls, but you do a great job of making it appealing. The exhibitionism was great, more of that would be nice. I'd also love to see a bit more humanXhuman and girlxgirl (either human OR pokemon, or perhaps... oh what are they called... Gijinka, but that's probably beyond the scope you have in mind for the story) but that's just my own preferences. I have to ask though, are you male or female? I don't mean to pry, but that would explain what sort of perspective you've got. As for first person vs second, they each have their own advantages. For my own writings (well, RPing mostly, I've never gotten around to actually WRITING anything up), I prefer to write my characters in first person, as it helps me get into character and feel what the character is feeling, but that's for my own benefit. Alternatively you might write it in third to appeal to a bit wider audience. So I guess it depends on whether you're writing it for yourself or your audience, or both. On the other hand, first person also gives the impression of someone telling a story TO you about what she's done, rather than the reader being an omniscient viewer. I think it would be interesting to see this from first person, but really I'd say it's just a matter of your personal preference. However, I didn't enjoy the third chapter as much as the first two, mostly because it's closing off doors that she could explore later on with others, but that also might just be my slight bias against the regular male pokemon on human girl thing... All in all, this is great so far, and I look forward to reading more from you. Oh, and just so you know how much I liked it, I've been using this site for years, and I finally registered just to be able to leave a review letting you know how much I enjoyed it.

    -GuyForFun AKA Strange Quark
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  • From TwistedBeauty on October 06, 2011
    you have something really good going here :) can't wait to see more
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  • From SkySan27 on October 05, 2011
    Not much of a cliffhanger. I can tell you pretty much what will happen next, possibly word for word. But that's just me. Overall it was a really good chapter, another insight into the real Team Plasma and their foolish views. It wasn't as good as the first chapter, but it's really difficult to outdo, so you did your best.

    That's pretty much all for now. I hope the next chapter is good and really hawt.
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  • From Omalley99 on October 02, 2011
    Let me just say first of all, well done, this is fantastic, especially if it really is your first time doing this. In particular your description is spot on, being detailed enough to draw us in whilst not bogging us down in details. The actual content of the story is good, I dont think I've really seen team plasma explored too much in any other stories. I sincerely hope you continue with this as I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, so please keep it up. Once again, well done.
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  • From fantome1 on October 02, 2011
    Fantastic. Look forward to more.
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  • From animekid on October 01, 2011
    As long as this doesn't turn in N/OC I'm good. Good start so far.
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  • From SkySan27 on October 01, 2011
    Well, you asked for constuctive criticism, so here ya go. It's spelled writing, silly.

    As for the story, you have impressed me. For one, this is the first story that I have read that really focuses on a member of Team Plasma. I'm assuming she's actually just a grunt at this point. But her Pokemon was a bit confusing. My first read through I had managed to overlook that Tiberius was a Krookodile, so I kept wondering "Is there a Pokemon named Tiberius?". But that was just my fault for overlooking it, so might not need any changing. The location was pretty darn smart. Chargestone cavern certainly has a lot of places to do some immoral, in the eyes of some, things like having sex with a Pokemon. The discription of the Conkeldurr's cock was a nice touch to hammer down how erotic and interesting the sex scene was.

    All in all this was a pretty nice first chapter. I look forward to the next one. Good luck!
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