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Reviews for Can\'t Fight the Moonlight

By : NurikoNoMiko
  • From ANON - C.X.Z on November 20, 2005
    *gasp* I like it. ^_^ it’s a pretty good story. Although, there’s not really much plot to it oO (not that ones needed with what you where writing ^_^)

    Although I do think that you need to watch your grammar and punctuation, ASPECIALY your punctuation. Indenting at a new paragraph makes any story easier to read, and keep in mind that the reader does not know what’s going on in your head. It’s best to assume the reader knows nothing and be thorough in describing what’s going on. Be extra careful when putting in a lot of conversation so the reader doesn’t have to guess at whose saying what. Other than that your writing is pretty good, I hope it keeps improving. ^_^

    and on a final note, The Vampire Lestat!!!!! WOOOO!!!! Go Anna Rice! I'm currently reading Memnoch The Devil ^_^

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  • From ANON - Petra on July 16, 2003
    This was a wonderful story, but I had a really hard time enjoying it, because throughout the entire thing, I kept thinking, "They are soo out of character" It was well written, but incredibly OOC. From my perspective, I highly doubt that IceKingStickUpHisAss!Aya would accept Yohji's advances that quickly, and be that warm and friendly. And Yohji, I don't think he'd be that caring. I've always seen him as the SarcasticAsshole!Yohji, and this doesn't seem to fit that image.
    But wonderful writing on the whole. I liked it.
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