rate_review Reviews

Wow! I think it\'s great!
There\'s only one think you should improve, and thats your english. But the rest is perfect! Lots of erotic and sex with a plot, too. So go on with your writing I\'ll be plesed! Would correct your mistakes if you want to, too. Just send a mail.

HOT STORY!!!!!

I really liked this fic especially your idea about luffy and his fingers entwinged to pleasure nami...a great idea hihi that you even thought about it. Keep up the good work cause your a really good writer ^^ *many hugs* Icy_Wind

This is fantastic! I never imagined LxN could have such great chemistry. Hope to see more writing from you!

Thanks for making me cum.

Seriously though, this is the best OP lemon thing I\'ve read so far. o.o;

sweet!! you finally finished it! oh, the joy, you have no idea. and luffy dearest stayed in character!!! amazing.
just a couple things... you might wanna go through a couple times, just read it and edit a little more. i found repeated, incomplete words a couple times, and words stuck together, i.e. \"weroppiopping\", and one \'right word, wrong spelling\' that broke the mood in the flashback deck scene (waste should be waist... cause, yeah, yuck.) but overall, it r0xx0red and i heart this story to death. i can\'t wait to see more of your work!! XD

This is the second time I read this story. It got better!...somehow. This is definitely an awesome story and was able to satisfy that certain need for Nami/Luffy fics. You did a great job in capturing their characters. I\'m not sure if Luffy would be so bold, but no one knows how he would be in that sitation! That would be hot if he was that bold. But besides his boldness in those situations, you still had him be his funny, unknowing yet knowing self. If that made sense. He had me laughing, so Luffy was Luffy. Nami was also being her normal often smart-alec self. To sum this review up, this is my favorite One Piece fanfic by far. I\'ll probably be back to reading some other time. It\'s worth it.

sweet

This was a great story. Even though I have no idea who these characters are, I could still get into it. Your sexual scenes were great and I loved how you took time to describe the kissing in the first chapter since that act is so important but many people completely glaze over it.