rate_review Reviews

Spelling and Grammatical errors aside, you've written a Great story, both VERY Sensual and Satisfying to boot! :) Personally I Loved the part when Haruko asks Naota (his name, BTW) if he wants to come with her to find Atomsk after that meaningful lovemaking scene. Sweet, compelling and at times comedic, this was a tale worth reading to the point where I'd like to review the entire series again. If you ever need a proof-reader just let me know and I'll work at your side helping with the technical tasks (English, spelling, etc.). Know that I, as well as many others who read the works you pen, look forward to more of your vision.

Jay

I liked it you should make one when Haroko and Naoto have a kid.

Let me know what you think.

could of had a better sex scene but it also had a really outstanding storyline goodwork!

That was the best FLCL fic ive ever read! if you find more info on FLCL make a second chapter to this story

Yaaaay for space travel! And smut!

Her name is haruhara haruko.
His name is Naota.

That bothered me the entire time, kehe.
Otherwise, good fic.

You may want to clean up your sentences. Some of them are hard to understand. But you have a very rock- n- rolly style of writing (speaking from a writers piont of view.)

You may want to clean up your sentences. Some of them are hard to understand. But you have a very rock- n- rolly style of writing (speaking from a writers piont of view.)

What do you mean the end? you should write more and when the find atamosk they should have a theesome. that is that unquestionable!

Quite a few spelling errors, but not too shabby!