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March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Incredibly riveting story dear. Full of angst and strong emotion. It kept me reading enthralled to the very end. Wonderful job with my favorite pairings.
Oh and to the reviewer that commented on the bad grammar. It is not the author. AFFN had some problems a while back and had to overhaul the site which messed with the formatting on a lot of the stories over 6 months old. It chopped some of the words off and took out a lot of the spacing. Check the older stories and you will see it on most of them unless the author came back in and fixed it. So before you complain about the author’s grammar get your facts straight.
Oh and to the reviewer that commented on the bad grammar. It is not the author. AFFN had some problems a while back and had to overhaul the site which messed with the formatting on a lot of the stories over 6 months old. It chopped some of the words off and took out a lot of the spacing. Check the older stories and you will see it on most of them unless the author came back in and fixed it. So before you complain about the author’s grammar get your facts straight.
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March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh my GOD!! you have the WORST GRAMMAR SKILLS I HAVE EVER SEEN IN MY ENTIRE LIFE!!!! Have you ever heard of a BETA READER???????? do you have any idea how many mistakes are in your chapters? in just about every sentance there is a word that you like....start typing and forget about or that you start typing and then start the word over again without erasing the first part! its REAAAAAALLLLLLLY a shame that the grammar is so messed up because your story is one of the most detailed, well thought out angst fics ive ever read....and it would get a 100 out of 10 from me if you just paid a bit more attention to what you\'re typing...
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November 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so I'm getting in way too late his his lovely ficcie. Great, great job, as to be expected. I'm holding you personally accountable for getting me all fan-girl gushy over Weiss; after reading "Never No Answer", I couldn't possible turn down the opp to read another animeghir *grins*, even though I hadn't seen the anime. I'm also sending you the bill for forcing me to purchase the series, you evil creature, you. Anyway, this was an engrossing fic, the story just sucked me in, and I found myself reading for several hours straight and avoiding any human contact (again, I blame you). I was shocked to see that this was your first fanfic; each chapter I read was better than the one before. I particularly liked what you did with Aya, keeping the complexity of his character even as he softened toward Yohji realistically. For me, there's nothing worse than reading a fic where a character swoons head-over-heels out of nowhere, and just becomes a different person. You managed to put both main couples together very realistically. As much as I enjoy pointless smut, it's so much more enjoyable to see such dimension brought to the characters, as you've done. Lovely job *runs off to read the cont*.
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June 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
WOW! That was awesome! ^_^ I loved the way you wrote the characters, very very real, and very much like their anime/manga personalities. You have a certain flair for words! VERY VERY VERY good. I can\'t say that enough. Novel full of smut or no, it was an AWESOME novel full of smut!
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June 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear god! Can we please just kill Aya-chan? And Sebastion too. Him because he is such a feckin\' low-life, scum-sucking piece of crap,/i>, her because she\'s got to be the most irritating, obnoxious, self-centered twit on the planet! Argh!! This is one of those stories that\'s like a train wreck; I don\'t want to look but I\'m totally rubbernecking here. I get tired reading this. Emotionally wearo ono one should have to go through what Aya(Ran) did. And Yohji too. He\'s just as emotionally beat up now as Aya. I just want everyone to be healthy and happy *sniffs*. Except for Sebastion and Aya-chan. They should be covered in honey and staked to an anthill.
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May 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m glad they finally hooked up, even if aya has no idea how he feels about the whole thing...
and i can\'t believe that little twist! Aya-chan using the money for herself....selfish bitch! Poor Aya-kun! I wanted to cry when i read that part!
This is so good!
and i can\'t believe that little twist! Aya-chan using the money for herself....selfish bitch! Poor Aya-kun! I wanted to cry when i read that part!
This is so good!
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May 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have opted to read everything without commenting on anything until I could see the end of this story, mainly because I wanted to see how far it spanned and how it ended.
I absolutely love this story.
Not so much the direction of the story but the writing. Skip a few grammar and misspelling mistakes, we all make them.
Kudos, you write well.
It\'s not the kind of story I normally read. When I realized Aya was so broken and in such a way after being a professional assassin. I had a hard time. The traits of his personality should not have allowed this to happen. Hard as nails, ice princess, always a professional, emotionally frigid in the outside, \'killer\' instincts.
But well,... at the end he gets that so needed confidence back that he so lacked. I\'m so happy for that. He needed that bust. and Yohgi was able to provide that in a way. I was beginning to get tired of his whippiness. He may not be able to lift his sword but he still has plenty of brains left. Lamp cord around someone\'s neck while using the ripped end off the lamp, still plugged to electrocute another. Three months don\'t seem like enough time to break a person like Aya. He\'s a fighter, he should\'ve lasted longer.
Nevertheless, I really do \'like\' this story.
My favorite parts have to be the Yohgi\'s killing spree. it was beautiful--syncizedized; my second favorite, Yohgi to the rescue, the way he simple bolted out the door and raced plunging against the limo and beat the baddies. I really liked that you left it to the imagination of the reader from Aya\'s limited view ahd hearing. And my third favorite, the dance floor massacre, I could see it in my head.
Good use of Ken and Omi as sex kittens.
For someone who really like the lemons with purpose or not. I liked the sexual cliffhanger. It leaves much to the imagination and also open to sequel.
Good work.
I absolutely love this story.
Not so much the direction of the story but the writing. Skip a few grammar and misspelling mistakes, we all make them.
Kudos, you write well.
It\'s not the kind of story I normally read. When I realized Aya was so broken and in such a way after being a professional assassin. I had a hard time. The traits of his personality should not have allowed this to happen. Hard as nails, ice princess, always a professional, emotionally frigid in the outside, \'killer\' instincts.
But well,... at the end he gets that so needed confidence back that he so lacked. I\'m so happy for that. He needed that bust. and Yohgi was able to provide that in a way. I was beginning to get tired of his whippiness. He may not be able to lift his sword but he still has plenty of brains left. Lamp cord around someone\'s neck while using the ripped end off the lamp, still plugged to electrocute another. Three months don\'t seem like enough time to break a person like Aya. He\'s a fighter, he should\'ve lasted longer.
Nevertheless, I really do \'like\' this story.
My favorite parts have to be the Yohgi\'s killing spree. it was beautiful--syncizedized; my second favorite, Yohgi to the rescue, the way he simple bolted out the door and raced plunging against the limo and beat the baddies. I really liked that you left it to the imagination of the reader from Aya\'s limited view ahd hearing. And my third favorite, the dance floor massacre, I could see it in my head.
Good use of Ken and Omi as sex kittens.
For someone who really like the lemons with purpose or not. I liked the sexual cliffhanger. It leaves much to the imagination and also open to sequel.
Good work.
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May 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hi! ^^ my best pal Ri told me of this fic, and I\'m a major fan for the couple (like scary major, lol) I luv it, its fucking fantastic, sweet and *yay* Dunno if Aya would ever let this happen to him, but ~yay fanfics!! Was in total \"my world is the suckiest world ever\" mode, and read this, fuckin\' cheered me up more than Foamy!!! & totally Gackt-licious *heart*
laterz, soz if i seem a little spazzy, haven\'t slept in ages and spent all night reading this....damn sun...with the shining XP
laterz, soz if i seem a little spazzy, haven\'t slept in ages and spent all night reading this....damn sun...with the shining XP
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May 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
First of all.. I want to say that it\'s been a while since a story has captivated me so. Nice work, I love reading it! I especially loved the Youji-Battle-Mode scene. I\'m such a sucker for violence. *smile* The way you write Aya and Youji together is so emotional! It\'s addicting, you know!!
Second, when typing in a word-processing program (like Word or Appleworks) a lot of the time some of the symbols get screwed up (like the \' \" etc) I think that might be your problem. The best solution is, if you\'re going to end up saving as a .txt, to type it in a text-based program like Notepad or TextEdit. You don\'t get any of the nice features, but it saves a bit of hassle in formatting.
...Or just sucker a kind person into beta-reading :) I\'ll be waiting for the next chapter!
Second, when typing in a word-processing program (like Word or Appleworks) a lot of the time some of the symbols get screwed up (like the \' \" etc) I think that might be your problem. The best solution is, if you\'re going to end up saving as a .txt, to type it in a text-based program like Notepad or TextEdit. You don\'t get any of the nice features, but it saves a bit of hassle in formatting.
...Or just sucker a kind person into beta-reading :) I\'ll be waiting for the next chapter!
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May 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey, I\'m a girl too, and i know from experience. it takes time to get used to the idea of blow jobs, but once you get used to it, it\'s not that bad. it can actually be rather fun ^_^
*cough*ahem.. anyway....
This story is great, 200%. I hope you update it soon, and i love the \'commercial breaks\' ^_^ gotta have a little fun between all the angst and gore, etc.
*cough*ahem.. anyway....
This story is great, 200%. I hope you update it soon, and i love the \'commercial breaks\' ^_^ gotta have a little fun between all the angst and gore, etc.