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LOve the story hope you update soon. very orignal i think and a very good start

I wouldn\'t go as far to say that no one has ever tried out this idea(I thought I saw one story on FF.net before the NC-17 stories disappeaer), but I wouldn\'t be surprize if ya\' did nor will I would be surprize if other stories are writen like this as well.

In fact, it has already happen over in the \"X-Men: E\" section. Someone wrote a story around Jamie, and almost 6 stories with him in them starting to show up.

Oh, thank you for cleaning up the story! Looks much better!

Great fic, in my opinion, and that is one heck of a new idea for a pokemon fan fiction. Too bad that now some people will rip off your idea. \'Raises a cup of sake\' Heres to the hope that you will always get full credit on this new idea.

I\'m not much for words so I\'ll just say very interesten. I\'ve never read a fic with a poke\'mon turning into a human. A new idea, we always need more of those.

Cool! Write more!

I wouldn\'t think Ash\'s mom would be that inconsideret. Well, as long as she understands what\'s happened. I hope no one else makes that mistake(however you spell it).

I like the plot, but the fact that it was all in italics bothered me. Also, you might want to brush up on the grammar thing. Also also, pe doe don\'t be a review whore, it\'s annoying.

I like Maganium, but she\'s maybe a little too human-savvy for a pokemon...that\'s just me though. I like the whole premise of pokemorphs but maybe she should cute/naive him into the sex... again, just my opinion.

A piece of advice one of my writing teachers told me: Don\'t use pop-culture references, they distract the reader and interrupt the mood of the story. I know, I\'ve used them a couple times when I had just started writing and my friends (who were my critics) mentioned that they didn\'t like it.

I like that the thoughts are in parentheses, that\'s very unique, but again, the grammar thing. You might want to read some stuff, like novels and stuff, it really helps in writing to read.

Anyway, I\'m sorry if I sound lecture-y, just trying to help ^_^\'

~Melantha

That whole being in italics is really annoying! I would get a beta if I was you and I would be more than happy to be your beta.

He he he. I didn\'t know my work actually rocked. Well you peeps will see another chapter in when I get back from vacation. \"It\'s darn near close to blackmail\" If I had
known this I wouldn\'t have set up the 10 reviews. Well when I come back I will update.

Nice Fic, well done.