rate_review Reviews

Hmm, I agree that this could\'ve used a bit more of a warning at the top. Talk to the readers and make them happy!
Otherwise, I liked the way you wrote it. It has a particularly cold feeling, which makes it realistically unreal (er..?).
I was looking around for more fiction by you, but there appears not to be any...at the moment. I hope the negative review didn\'t scare you away.
If I could make one last note, I ought to mention that the text had numerous accidental line breaks that made it hard to read. That could be fixed easily by re-typing or uploading as text area.
Anyway, have a nice day!

so sad

Wataru-chan says:
OYYYYY?!?!!? ::has intense spaz:: Do you like making Ken-kun suffer?!?!?! ::revives Ken:: Oy vey dude... I\'ve gotta say it\'s really well-written... I don\'t know how much I can say about the plot... T_T T_T T_T T_T The sorrow! Oh the pain and sorrow! ::clutches Ken:: Ayaaaa you bakaaa

Ms. Mamoru:
*grabs ken from wataru and runs off with him to a hospital* MY KEN!! OH AYA, YOU KILLED MY KEN!! *sobs*
*gets ken into a hospital bed to use reviving powers*
*hesitates before putting aya in ooo* oo*
dunno if i should save you....you KILLED KEN and YOURSELF.....T_T
well written but RIDICULOUSLY SAD!!!! INETHICALLY AND HORRENDOUSLY SAD!

You need to add a proper warning to this story, DEATHFIC alone will not cover it. This story contains graphic violence and rape, which you failed to mention and it was therefore unexpected and unwelcomed. I suggest you put a proper wng ung up so that no one else has to be so unpleasantly surprised as I was.

Well what do you know? That\'s how I always wanted to see Ken die. -sick woman-

Nee, you ever need a beta reader or any help you can definately come to me. This story had a way sexy concept. ^.~