rate_review Reviews

Okay, this is sounding interesting, but there are things that can be improved. The first that jumped out at me (from your summary, specifically) is that you used an apostrophe with plurals. You don\'t need it; it\'s humans, not human\'s. It would be human\'s however, if you were saying something like, \'It was the human\'s toy,\' talking about one person.

Another thing is that it\'s abandoned houses, past tense. They\'d already been abadoned, not in the process of being abandoned, if you get what I mean. Ocassionally, there\'s a wrong word here and there, but nothing too major.

If you\'d like me to beta some of your stuff, give me an email. Just keep in mind that for the next week and a half I have exams. XD;

Good luck,
Ekki.

Interesting tale, sir, very interesting. And in your characters age list I notice Meilin isn\'t there. Is she not going to be in this? I think she\'d make a very cute vampiress. All in all, I look forward to the next installment. Laters.

I like this story alot. I love the way you described this world and what little we know of the political power at play in this time and place. Its an Interesting concept that goes wonderfully with your characters. (or at least in my opion) :)
cant wait for the next installment
peaches

hey! i just reade the 4th chapter. it was really good. aithough i am confused to who the girl was. and didn\'t u say that he didn\'t drink human blood! y the change? can u email me to answer my qousten?

hey! i just reade the 4th chapter. it was really good. aithough i am confused to who the girl was. and didn\'t u say that he didn\'t drink human blood! y the change? can u email me to answer my qousten?