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April 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i lov eit please update no sugetions here you r a good writer o yea can misao find out she is pregnet and start morning sickness and crap like that (but they still do the case)? pleaseeeeeeeeeeee
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March 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am so glad to see that you updated! You are still doing a wonderful job at keeping Misao and Aoshi in character, and their characters are developing nicely. I look froward to your next chapter!
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March 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
In response to one of your reviews: you do have some grammatical errors, however your characters are sound and your story idea is good! I think you have what it takes to write!
Grammar is probably one of the easiest things to correct, albeit, tedious(I have to admit, grammar was never my forte. I always have to rewrite everything. I am constantly editing). It is just a technical skill that can be learned through practice and editing in multiple drafts (a good manual helps also). Creativity, on the other hand(which is essential to writing a story), is not so easily learned (and you have creativity in spades)! Grammar does not make the story (it is a component), it just helps make the story flow. Two books I would suggest are: \"The Elements of Style\" by Strunk& White, and, \"Writing Down the Bones\" by (I think) Natalie Goldberg. The book \"Writing Down the Bones\" is a very enjoyable read regarding writing, creativity, and the writing life. \"The Elements of Style\" is a thin (very thin) no nonsense book on the technical aspects of writing (i.e. grammar). Anyway, I am enjoying your story and hope you continue! ^__^
P.S. Be careful of your inner critic! Write your first draft without concern for the technical aspects of writing. Get your story on paper, and then, after that, edit for grammar, puntuation, and spelling. I have always found that if I worry about grammar when I first start ot write, I never get anything written! That is why I suggest writing in multiple drafts.
Grammar is probably one of the easiest things to correct, albeit, tedious(I have to admit, grammar was never my forte. I always have to rewrite everything. I am constantly editing). It is just a technical skill that can be learned through practice and editing in multiple drafts (a good manual helps also). Creativity, on the other hand(which is essential to writing a story), is not so easily learned (and you have creativity in spades)! Grammar does not make the story (it is a component), it just helps make the story flow. Two books I would suggest are: \"The Elements of Style\" by Strunk& White, and, \"Writing Down the Bones\" by (I think) Natalie Goldberg. The book \"Writing Down the Bones\" is a very enjoyable read regarding writing, creativity, and the writing life. \"The Elements of Style\" is a thin (very thin) no nonsense book on the technical aspects of writing (i.e. grammar). Anyway, I am enjoying your story and hope you continue! ^__^
P.S. Be careful of your inner critic! Write your first draft without concern for the technical aspects of writing. Get your story on paper, and then, after that, edit for grammar, puntuation, and spelling. I have always found that if I worry about grammar when I first start ot write, I never get anything written! That is why I suggest writing in multiple drafts.
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March 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey, i hope you take this professionally. well, you really have to improve your grammar. you\'ve got run-ons, dang mog modifiers, wrong prepositions, etc. everywhere. i mean, the words are all over the place! also, you kinda have a problem with the \'putting together\' of words. i mean, i think you can express yourself better. well, it\'s really not your fault. some people can write and some people just don\'t have IT. i don\'t mean to make you feel bad but i think you\'re more of a reader than a writer. i do think that you can improve yourself a lot.
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March 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow, great! I can\'t believe what an imp you are making Kaoru, this story is so unpredictable and that\'s what makes it great! i can\'t wait til you update, thanks for the great update! hope you do it again soon!!!
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March 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
omg this is soo funny! really good 2..keep it up and update soon!!!
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
YAY *claps* I do not know why you think you are bad at writing lemons... I have read alot and believe me that was good! I wanna know who that guy was... was it Sanosuke? was it was it huh? lol, oh yeah are himura-san and Kaoru-dono good?
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Last chapter was good! Don\'try ary about the lemon, plot is more important (reviewer is now being beaten by hoards of hentai fanfic fans ^__^). Some of the best stories I\'ve read only teased at a lemon, or did not get to the lemon until many chapters had passed. Anyway, I think you are doing just fine! Keep up the good work! ^__^
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I can help you with your lemons if you like. I do like the story thus far.
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March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Your last chapter was so cute and provided such nice comic relief. I always thought Misao\'s exuberant personality against Aoshi\'s cold facade allowed for quite a bit of humor (mostly a t Aoshi\'s expense ^__^)! As for your story \"A Twist, With Spice\" (a story I absely ely adore), I am not sure what you are talking about (missing chapter?). I started reading it here at AFF.net and then tripped across it at FF.net, where you have more chapters posted. I do not remember feeling like theas aas anything wrong with the flow of the story, so I guess I would advise not changing it (however, I will reread it at FF.net and let you know if my opinion changes). Anyway, I think you are doing a great job! Thank you for all your hard work, and please keep it up!