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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh! Please continue this. My only criticism is that a new paragraph should be started whenever someone new is speaking. It'll also make the chapter appear longer.
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November 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wah, you need to finish it....i want to know what happens.
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
....Dont stop writing.. I NEED to KNOW what happen....HOw the others react........AHHHH! HOw could you lave it like THAT!!!!!...
*calming down* So anyway keep writing ...
*calming down* So anyway keep writing ...
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September 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
u need to correct the spelling and dont leave everybody on that bad of a cliffhanger but other than that i seen no problems so good luck on finishing it. It has a lot of potential to be a very good story.