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mel is not a cyborg she is a bio androed the difrens bieng a ciborg is a humen who has had robotic sergery on them and a bio android is a robot that has had humen parts grown and used as part of ther cotrowl unit apart from that amaising fic

It started out so well with Melfina\'s thoughts and emotions...but then chapter two just went downhill from that. The story lost it\'s emotional tones and suddenly became nothing a cheaply-described PWP. I think the most disturbing thing was the use of slang, especially in Melfina\'s case. I\'m not saying you can\'t go OOC...but normally you give fair warning about those kind of things. Had you stuck with the emotional aspect of r rer relationship rather than turning it into a slang-filled PWP, I would have enjoyed it more.

Hehehe You so crazy!!!!! Cute cute cute!!!!

it\'s a veeerrrrrryyyyyy good lemon fic if you are a virgin.good job!

Uh..you don\'t even want to know what I thought of your story because well...look what you wrote! I mean damn...you ever write any stories other then the lemon? You\'d be really good!

Well, it was interesting. BUt for your next fic, I would recomend less dialog and more screwing. Thank you.

What the fuck did you do to Outlaw Star!?
Did they go from being Japaese Charactes to black ppl with Japanese names?
GAWD DAMN!!!
What you wrote wasn't a lemon that was a fucking comedy..... and I mean FUCKING comedy.
That is some funny shit.
Ther was nothing sensual, romantic, or loving about it.
That, my friend, was prue fucking.
No that theres a problem with it .... just it's not Outlaw Star material.
The beging was decent but then it got funnier ad funnier.
After the comment that went something like this: "What the fuck!?Nigga why'd you stop!?"
I had to stop and read the shit agian.
Wen I finally relized that's what you said I was literaly ROFL.
That is definitely some funny shit.

Don't feel bad ...... casue this is not flaming your story.
I just wanted to let you know that your no Romeo nigga.
I can see your story happening if gee had a little bling bling, but I'm sorry.
It's not happening any time soon.

E-mail me If you want me to go on, but for now, I'm a shut up and send this muther fucka.

"What the @#%$?!"

Hey! lol. Nice story. I liked the way you described things. Kinda graphic. Are you going to write more? XD

Great job. I loved the dialouge and you aren't afraid to be... erm... descriptive. ^__^ Is this your first one? Ever considering doing more for other anime? How about yuri or yaoi? ^_^ I'd love to read more of your delightfully graphic narratives.