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November 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
First, i would like to congratulate you for all the chapters you have written up until now! your writing is really good and adds a lot to your story (i can tell though i'm not a native speaker myself).
Even if the theme of your fic frightened me at first, i decided to read it because i'm a total shipper for Michael/Sakaki. Then, i continued because of the quality, though i swear, some of the scenes got me almost crying or ready to raise fit the Sakaki way - or with goosebumps and nausea and indignation boiling in my veins !
I mean, this kind of story, when you read the usual fanfic, will always be so terribly cliche and wrong (you'd get a Michael who'd love to be molested just like in most the fics about rape). You actually just describe so well and humanly your characters that your fic goes way beyond the typical "rape-type" fics.
The greatest strenght of the portraits you make here of Michael, Sakaki, amon and even Zaizen, is that you don't try to overdo it all. You remain sincere in descriptions even if it puts the character in situations that are not making them look bright, that show they have flaws and this is what makes your fic so realistic and the reader can't help but identify to the characters. You can't help but being amazed by Michael's inner strenght, resisting with a kind of wry humour though he dares to reveals his frailty since he can rely on Sakaki. Sakaki himself is incredibely touching, he just lloks like the normal guy who gets trapped into something too big but keeps on fighting back, hesitating and lost at some point but able to recover and keep on. The secrets you revealed about Amon are also a great trick to your scenario and keeps on adding depth to the character.
Wow, i spoke a lot, but i dare say, i read your fic in one night a while ago, and sine then, i keep passing by to see if you updated, and i'm really glad you will, because i feel bad not knowing what will happen to these boys.
You chose a very hard subject and treat it a very good way ! Keep it up and thanks for sharing your fic !
Even if the theme of your fic frightened me at first, i decided to read it because i'm a total shipper for Michael/Sakaki. Then, i continued because of the quality, though i swear, some of the scenes got me almost crying or ready to raise fit the Sakaki way - or with goosebumps and nausea and indignation boiling in my veins !
I mean, this kind of story, when you read the usual fanfic, will always be so terribly cliche and wrong (you'd get a Michael who'd love to be molested just like in most the fics about rape). You actually just describe so well and humanly your characters that your fic goes way beyond the typical "rape-type" fics.
The greatest strenght of the portraits you make here of Michael, Sakaki, amon and even Zaizen, is that you don't try to overdo it all. You remain sincere in descriptions even if it puts the character in situations that are not making them look bright, that show they have flaws and this is what makes your fic so realistic and the reader can't help but identify to the characters. You can't help but being amazed by Michael's inner strenght, resisting with a kind of wry humour though he dares to reveals his frailty since he can rely on Sakaki. Sakaki himself is incredibely touching, he just lloks like the normal guy who gets trapped into something too big but keeps on fighting back, hesitating and lost at some point but able to recover and keep on. The secrets you revealed about Amon are also a great trick to your scenario and keeps on adding depth to the character.
Wow, i spoke a lot, but i dare say, i read your fic in one night a while ago, and sine then, i keep passing by to see if you updated, and i'm really glad you will, because i feel bad not knowing what will happen to these boys.
You chose a very hard subject and treat it a very good way ! Keep it up and thanks for sharing your fic !
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March 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful! er..um...Zaizen\'s pure evil, he is! But that\'s not stopping me from wanting another update! i can\'t wait. Take as long as you like, as long as it turns out just as wonderful!(but not too long to update, plz!)
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December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have really enjoyed reading the installments of "Power and Control." While I admit that I appreciate the sexual content as much as the next repressed, overworked college student, I like the way that this story explores fear (rational or not) and the need for human contact. Also like that it isn't all sunshine and puppy dogs, because that sort of life isn't likely for these particular characters. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW. I just read all 12 chapters over four days, but that\'s all I can come up with to say... For the most part. Here\'s the rest:
All the characters seem spot on, great job. You also have a great sense for describing everything just enough... Not so much that it becomes weirdly distrubing, but not so little that one can distance him/herself from it.
By the way, it seems you are trying to hard to hint that Sakaki will be the one to give Zaizen his comeuppance, while setting up Michael to actually snap and do something for his lover\'s sake... but then there\'s the complexity that is Amon... Great job at keeping us readers guessing! And you had better give the boys some slack soon, or at least another small reprieve, preferably lemon flavored...
On a more personal note: As a gay male stuck in a small, homophobic town in Texas, I\'ll admit that the idea of rape becomes tempting sometimes, but whenever it does, something comes along to change my mind, completely... Like this wonderful story of yours. Thanks.
I\'ll be waiting anxiously for the next chapter!
All the characters seem spot on, great job. You also have a great sense for describing everything just enough... Not so much that it becomes weirdly distrubing, but not so little that one can distance him/herself from it.
By the way, it seems you are trying to hard to hint that Sakaki will be the one to give Zaizen his comeuppance, while setting up Michael to actually snap and do something for his lover\'s sake... but then there\'s the complexity that is Amon... Great job at keeping us readers guessing! And you had better give the boys some slack soon, or at least another small reprieve, preferably lemon flavored...
On a more personal note: As a gay male stuck in a small, homophobic town in Texas, I\'ll admit that the idea of rape becomes tempting sometimes, but whenever it does, something comes along to change my mind, completely... Like this wonderful story of yours. Thanks.
I\'ll be waiting anxiously for the next chapter!
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July 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I accidentally stumbled upon this fic, but ooh! It\'s so addictive! XD I couldn\'t stop reading! Hope to see updates soon, especially if those updates involve Zaizen getting the crap kicked out of him. =[
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July 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
thank you thank you thank you for updating i was so happy to see it was updated i love this story so much it\'s the only story i look foward to updating
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow....that was an incredible chapter. I am amzed...I\'m not sure what else to say. The depth of emotion, the simple need to be accepted and comforted that Amon expresses...Sakaki\'s need to make everything as alright as he can....and his desire to ensure it ends. This is simply an amazing story. Thank you for going through the process of writing it for us. I understand about life getting in the way of writing...I hope it\'s pleasant things getting in your way. Thank you.
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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yeah! Thanks for the update! I\'m glad Amaon and Sakai are getting along - poor babies! Please update ASAP, I must know how Michael is doing - thanks!
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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. You have kept me on edge with the twists in the plot. I love how realistic it is (minus the witch thing). Keep kicking out the chapters! I love how Amon isn\'t a huge prick and how begins to open himself up to Sakaki. Wonderful!
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June 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, satisfaction. I\'ve missed reading good fanfiction. I swear I had so many plans this summer, and reading this chapter was first on my list, but then...I got a job! ::gasp:: I never in a million years thought that this would be the summer! So...I\'m behind on many of the things I wanted to do when school let out. I\'m catching up whenever I can, and here I am!
Me likes! I was excited to see Karasuma step up to the plate; I hope to see more of her. I can\'t stop thinking of her as a matriarch of sorts. And even the little bit with Robin was refreshing. I was very content to read this. I would say I miss them, I guess. It\'s been a while since I\'ve written WHR, read or watched it, so...that\'s probably it. But, honestly, reading this is just like watching it. It seriously is. ::rubs hands together:: It\'s so satisfying!
So...more please. I think it\'s been a while since the last post, so more more more!! I\'ll be waiting!
J3
Me likes! I was excited to see Karasuma step up to the plate; I hope to see more of her. I can\'t stop thinking of her as a matriarch of sorts. And even the little bit with Robin was refreshing. I was very content to read this. I would say I miss them, I guess. It\'s been a while since I\'ve written WHR, read or watched it, so...that\'s probably it. But, honestly, reading this is just like watching it. It seriously is. ::rubs hands together:: It\'s so satisfying!
So...more please. I think it\'s been a while since the last post, so more more more!! I\'ll be waiting!
J3