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November 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Overall, I found this to be an excellent story, though the court scenes began to remind me of the court scenes in the Pink Floyd movie The Wall. I did notice a few spelling errors here and there, but not many. I look forward to reading more of his (my assumption there) writtings.
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October 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cool
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December 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow... that was just... wow... great job. You're a very good writer. I didn't actually read the first two chapters because... well... I don't like seeing May raped... nor anybody. Especally May... yup... I like May. Scratch that, I adore her. Anywayz, the story itself was actually what kept me loving it. You were very creative with both your characters and the original ones... such as that first judge, Father O'conner(or whatever his name was. Forgot already. :3), John, the other judge... that stuff. Norman was hillarious, aboslutely hillarious; what with the drinking and all that. My favorite part though had to be when Ash was finally freed... warmed my heart...
Anyway, once again, great story! Keep it up! Although next time... if you ever want to write outside of the reality of this one, if you ever want to do another May/Max, maybe it could be consensual or May dominated? Perferrably the latter... sort of like her getting payback, you know? (Muhahahaaa...)
Anyway, once again, great story! Keep it up! Although next time... if you ever want to write outside of the reality of this one, if you ever want to do another May/Max, maybe it could be consensual or May dominated? Perferrably the latter... sort of like her getting payback, you know? (Muhahahaaa...)
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohh, very messes up, but very good work, it was one of the best stories I ever read.
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Despite the random Bush bashing, though I wonder if that actually would happen.... And the usual spelling/grammer errors in fanfics, I found it interesting to say the least. It seemed well thought out and very good plot, you twisted psyco. I thought my head was messed up, then I read this. I almost expected May to get it on with her father after he took her away, but thankfully, you didn\'t. Atleast Max met a satisfying end. I hope you go on to make more fanfics and if you are ever in the York/Harrisburg area, let me know so I can flee lol.
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
We need more insane people in this world. Like you
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August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok WTF you have many Mental issues to make this story i mean oh my fucking god that was a twisted and gross story.
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Amazing, although, I wanted to strangle you when I thought Ash really was gonna catch the blame.
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July 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Even tho this story was fucking sick and twisted...hell, I might have nightmares from it. It was a great story, very well written. It was a very...original story to say the least. I hope you keep writing, you have a definate flare for the art.
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Man,Great Plot,Story,Desciption,...............-Everything in the story is good keep it up