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O-O Why the cliffy! MORE!!!! *flies around you\'re head* Update!!!

great story!!!! I knew max was a little bitch. Keep up the good work. I hope it gets more sadistic. Good Luck!

Okay! THIS IS GREAT! I\'m so glad that you support AAMistyR and diss AAMayR... Although, if you plan on killing Max later on in the fic, could I help you out? I have plenty of things I could use for torture... And it was REAL kawaii when you introduced Ash\'s admittance of love for Misty. Made me wanna scream with happiness. But all I could do was squeal because my mom would think I was insande if I started jumping. Anyway, THANKS FOR MAKING MAY OUT TO BE A SLUTTY NON-EXISTANT CHARACTER. I-I mean... I feel so sorry for that poor girl... Oh, Hell. Everone hates her, and those who don\'t should just quit participatiing in PKMN things all together. But I\'ll shut up and read the fifth chapter now. (That\'s right; I was kind enough to review the fourth because I missed reading it when you first updated.) --Chibi/Faceless

I\'m back again because you deserve a seperate review for this chapter. First, of course, I loved the sick and twisted lines. Second, ASH AND MISTY GOT TOGETHER! LET US JOIN HANDS IN GODLY SONG! Oh, thank you so much my Friend! I\'ve beeldinlding out for this part FOREVER. Of course, I won\'t stop reading just because it\'s finally happened. Especially now that the little Fucker has turned the tides and mentioned Ash\'s doing unclean things to him, as well as his sister. MISTY\'S COMING BACK! THANK YOU SO MUCH! --Chibi

For some reason while all the characters but May and Brock have become bastards, it still works... Please write more.

This fanfic has some major mischaracterization. Mostly Ash is out of character. He would never be so indifferent about what happened to May. Sure, the two argue but he still considers her a good friend. If he didn\'t, she(nor Max) would be traveling with him. There is also a lot of things he says during the story that don\'t sound like him at all. For example, he is not one to be open about his feelings for Misty. On the show, he\'s never quite confessed his feelings to anyone(maybe not even to himself). Perhaps, instead of the scene where he talks to Brock about it, you might want to make it that he is thinking about Misty alone.

Also I\'m finding it hard to grasp that Max would actually do those things to May. But that\'s just me, I suppose...

Now Brock and May were well enough in character, especially with May\'s naivete in chapter 4 over not knowing about the sexual things her brother was doing.

The writing itself was alright. However in chapter one, the dialogue has questionrks rks than quotation ones.

Other than those little nitpicks, you have an okay fic overall.

God, thank you--THEY\'RE GONE! May and Max are gone for good, right? I hope you bring Misty back; you certainly had Ash complain enough about her leaving in chapter two... I love this fic, but I\'d love it even more if Misty re-entered the scene. And I don\'t care how sanity-deprived and wicked your mind is; YOU, AS AN AUTHOR, ROCK!

--Chibi

Hmmm. Interesting. So, when will it become apparant to everyone that Max was the one who did this? Though, it seems to me that he has some mental issues that need to be dealt with. But, that can come later. I just hope that he doesn\'t take it any further than just hurting someone that bad. But, I have a feeling that he will.