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December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You need to watch how you change groups. I was reading third chapter with the group jumping and it gave me a serious head ache. Consider revising those chapters to show the jumps easier. Your readers may stay after that.
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December 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I can\'t say anything about the story because I can\'t fucking read it, it switches from this group of people to another group of people without warning or section breaks, it needs to have everything that happend to one group, then everything that happend to the other group, not split up like that
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
\"Gaijin\" means \"outsider,\" it refers to any non-Japanese person (not just Americans)...