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July 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
What a relief that I could find your story here! Annoying F+#$s of fanfiction with their attitude!
WOW an UPDATE!! Heaven actually EXISTS! I must thank you for the continuation of this serie AND for answering our reviews that was very considerate of you :bows:
About the answering review: I didn\'t meaning love in some sex-way -_- , more in an brotherly way. HEeeEW -_-; I\'m not fun for Sanzo/Goku pairing... So thanks for the \"Goku’s not meant for sex\" I agree with you o_o
About the story: Pulp Fiction Style rocks! Your POVs rocks a LOT too. I love the way you put enfasis with the writing typo changing (cursivas on some specific words). The story is so intense and the FACT that you put it in a POV way is so dramatically real that you almost feel it in your skin (creepy), also with the way you\'re telling a story that happened but Sanzo is remembering it with you in present time...
About your last chapter (8): exactly THAT way a was meaning about the more love thing!! The interaction between Goku-Sanzo-Gojyo was simply TASTY! the protectivenes from Goku: SOO Sweet AND cool, the embarrasment of \"GENJO FUCKING SANZO\" (I\'m still laughing about that) and the \"I want more but don\'t want to be noticed\" actitude of Gojyo AND the bozou. lol: Hakkai actually DRUNK. A little funny the fact that you put Goku a lot more brainless in comparison with the others chapters but loved the protective way. What a cliffhanger at the end!
I\'m waiting for an update SOON please! I\'d just love to see the \"analysis\" of the erm-events of a sober HakkaSanzSanzo in more embarassing situations, Goku this way and Gojyo, mmm just being him hehe. And what was that at the end of the chapter? Morventventure problems? More evil guys??? XD :grins:
Thanks again and congratulations, I\'m a fan of yours!
WOW an UPDATE!! Heaven actually EXISTS! I must thank you for the continuation of this serie AND for answering our reviews that was very considerate of you :bows:
About the answering review: I didn\'t meaning love in some sex-way -_- , more in an brotherly way. HEeeEW -_-; I\'m not fun for Sanzo/Goku pairing... So thanks for the \"Goku’s not meant for sex\" I agree with you o_o
About the story: Pulp Fiction Style rocks! Your POVs rocks a LOT too. I love the way you put enfasis with the writing typo changing (cursivas on some specific words). The story is so intense and the FACT that you put it in a POV way is so dramatically real that you almost feel it in your skin (creepy), also with the way you\'re telling a story that happened but Sanzo is remembering it with you in present time...
About your last chapter (8): exactly THAT way a was meaning about the more love thing!! The interaction between Goku-Sanzo-Gojyo was simply TASTY! the protectivenes from Goku: SOO Sweet AND cool, the embarrasment of \"GENJO FUCKING SANZO\" (I\'m still laughing about that) and the \"I want more but don\'t want to be noticed\" actitude of Gojyo AND the bozou. lol: Hakkai actually DRUNK. A little funny the fact that you put Goku a lot more brainless in comparison with the others chapters but loved the protective way. What a cliffhanger at the end!
I\'m waiting for an update SOON please! I\'d just love to see the \"analysis\" of the erm-events of a sober HakkaSanzSanzo in more embarassing situations, Goku this way and Gojyo, mmm just being him hehe. And what was that at the end of the chapter? Morventventure problems? More evil guys??? XD :grins:
Thanks again and congratulations, I\'m a fan of yours!
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July 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Whops! Fe de Errata: a mistake in the last review.
I actually find Goku less brainless that in the others chapters or more thoughtfull. NOt more. that\'s it!
I actually find Goku less brainless that in the others chapters or more thoughtfull. NOt more. that\'s it!
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July 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow. ^________^! I first saw this story on the 2004 Boys Next Door Smut Contest, and I\'m so happy to see it here, too! (Obviously I\'m not very observant if it took me this long to find such a wonderful story here on AFF.net u.u) I\'ve never read a story where Sanzo is protrayed as so self-destructive, even BEFORE the rape, and though it twists me up inside the protrayal feels so *right*. The way the memories came back to him, first just a tad because of seeing that blanket, and then in the bathroom, the way they overcame him like a flood - and the subsequent urge to cut himself and make himself look as nasty as he felt, and the very human desire to be needed... I could go on and on! It\'s so perfectly human it almost makes me wan cry cry.
I loved Kanzeon as well, btw, although I\'m not sure if she really curses that much in the manga? It fits her personality, either way. She\'s very coarse for a God/dess of Mercy. ^-^
Oh, and I\'m especially pleased with the way you\'ve written Goku (the first chapter from his POV made me very, very hungry. >.
God, I love this so much! I am now one of your zombie minions! >.
I loved Kanzeon as well, btw, although I\'m not sure if she really curses that much in the manga? It fits her personality, either way. She\'s very coarse for a God/dess of Mercy. ^-^
Oh, and I\'m especially pleased with the way you\'ve written Goku (the first chapter from his POV made me very, very hungry. >.
God, I love this so much! I am now one of your zombie minions! >.
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July 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*Hugs animegher* Have I told you that I love you?? No?? Then let me rectify that! *I Love You* What a great day this has turned out to be. Just when I had given up hope, you thrill me to no end with not only another chapter but the promise of more to come!! This was awesome. Poor Sanzo. I love him being all angsty!! And I swear I can just hear him saying \"Genjo Fucking Sanzo\"!! I had really wanted to see what would happen the next day and this surpassed all my expectations. Your characterization of Goku was incredible too. When he wouldn\'t leave Gojyo alone with Sanzo, I was almost as proud of him as Sanzo was. I love how Sanzo cares so much for him without realizing how much he does. It was so sweet and touching. You always seem to put in these little touches that give us so much insight into not only the character and their mind but but into incidents in their lives too. I feel like I know them er. er. That is a rare gift, to be able to write so cleverly as you do. While I envy you this ability, I am grateful to be able to reap the benefits of your talent. I can\'t thank you enough for continuing this and I know how long it must take to write this all up and I realize it is terribly crass of me to ask this, but please.....I need the next chapter!!!
BTW-I truly enjoyed the chapter of answering the reviewers. That was so considerate and thoughtful. It was almost like we were sitting around chatting. I liked that. Sometimes you wonder how your reviews are met and it was nice to get the feedback in the other direction. Thanks!!
BTW-I truly enjoyed the chapter of answering the reviewers. That was so considerate and thoughtful. It was almost like we were sitting around chatting. I liked that. Sometimes you wonder how your reviews are met and it was nice to get the feedback in the other direction. Thanks!!
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June 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
the story is really really good but my it just stop right there isn\'t end already. yeah i really like that sanzo in the breakbown hehe ganbate plz update it fast if there is continous story
bla bla bla mind my bad eng
bla bla bla mind my bad eng
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June 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
love the story XD
but unfortunatly, it feels like most of the charater\'s conversations have been repeating or refrased...
i\'m currently finnished chpt4 (maybe you explained this later) but didn\'t you write that Sanzo \'lost\' his gun in the snow? Then how could he be defending himsel with it? ^^;
Anyway, keep up with the good work ^__^
but unfortunatly, it feels like most of the charater\'s conversations have been repeating or refrased...
i\'m currently finnished chpt4 (maybe you explained this later) but didn\'t you write that Sanzo \'lost\' his gun in the snow? Then how could he be defending himsel with it? ^^;
Anyway, keep up with the good work ^__^
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May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Saints be praised. I thought we would only have chapter 6 and lo and behold my surpise to see a chapter 7. And what a chapter. I forgive the length in thanks for granting me more. I would dearly love a chapter 8, though, cos the next day will be a day to remember for all. Not to mention the next week. I realize I am just being greedy, but you can\'t blame a demon for trying. You are so right......there was no place in there to pause. NO PLACE AT ALL! Thanks for writing such a great fic and I look forward to another..........hopefully in the near future??? You have a really great way with words and drescriptions that allow the reader to feel themselves inside the room watching instead of the outside looking in. And believe me, in this one that was not always a good thing. I appreciated the realistic tone of this tale and hope you can be tempted to treat us again.
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May 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sanzo, Gojyo, Hakkai, even Goku - they hurt.
So badly and yet one cannot stop reading.
I\'m a sucker for 5x3 anyway and there are so few stories out there. The good ones, I mean.
It somehow feels right that Gojyo and Sanzo cannot be together without the pain, although
to this point them getting together is more of a side affect - nevertheless intriguing.
Sanzo\'s trauma and the effect it has on all people around him, no matter if he wants it or not,
cuts deep. Damn, the hurt is tangible, one can taste it on the tongue while reading.
The story is mesmerizing to a point where it threatens to overwhelm all senses.
The chapter in which we get the inside of Goku - a chaer Ier I would only use for comic relieve - is awesome.
Kanzeon is portrayed as the evil witch bitch he/she is, one had to smirk at that.
I hope you are planning on continuing the story. I would like to know how Gojyo reacts the day after and how Hakkai
will cope with the situation. And I really want to know if Sanzo and Gojyo have actual
feelings for each other apart from hatred and lust. Or will Sanzo simply continue to chase the hurt away and crawl into
Gojyo\'s bed each night to forget for a few hours. That would open a door to a new level of pain.
Damn, you are really on to something there. Don\'t stop.
*wow
ryushin
So badly and yet one cannot stop reading.
I\'m a sucker for 5x3 anyway and there are so few stories out there. The good ones, I mean.
It somehow feels right that Gojyo and Sanzo cannot be together without the pain, although
to this point them getting together is more of a side affect - nevertheless intriguing.
Sanzo\'s trauma and the effect it has on all people around him, no matter if he wants it or not,
cuts deep. Damn, the hurt is tangible, one can taste it on the tongue while reading.
The story is mesmerizing to a point where it threatens to overwhelm all senses.
The chapter in which we get the inside of Goku - a chaer Ier I would only use for comic relieve - is awesome.
Kanzeon is portrayed as the evil witch bitch he/she is, one had to smirk at that.
I hope you are planning on continuing the story. I would like to know how Gojyo reacts the day after and how Hakkai
will cope with the situation. And I really want to know if Sanzo and Gojyo have actual
feelings for each other apart from hatred and lust. Or will Sanzo simply continue to chase the hurt away and crawl into
Gojyo\'s bed each night to forget for a few hours. That would open a door to a new level of pain.
Damn, you are really on to something there. Don\'t stop.
*wow
ryushin
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May 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Intense!! That is the only word I can come up with. Seriously intense. You have done a great job with this story. Yes, there probably were a few grammatical errors, but when you are reading a story this intense, you either don\'t notice them or just ignore them outright. I chose the latter. You have captured the characters perfectly. I would have loved to have had a glimpse of what was going on in Son Goku\'s mind when he was transformed, and would have really enjoyed seeing what happened when Sanzo and Goku woke up. The story was excellent and I too enjoyed finding out the details little bit at a time. I hope you write more.
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May 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am assuming this was the big finale….the conclusion? I can see where it is and I can see where there is room to continue the story. This , of course, means you have truly captured the spirit of our love which is known as Saiyuki.
Yes, this chapter had some technical errors. Such is life. We all have technical errors. It is very hard to proof and edit your own work. After all you know what you mean to say and you know what the scene looks like. It takeotheother, and another, and another, to be able to tell if the reader will see it as the author does. This is why professional writers get professional editors.
As fanfic writers we do try to presgoodgood quality work, but we write between school, work and home life. We’re worn out by the time we get to the PC and if someone wants to nit-pick let them.
I have really enjoyed this story. I felt you characterized all of them quite well, and the plot itself was quite good. I like how you kept the reader in the dark as much as Sanzo was, is and will be. You’re OC’s were well flushed out given their level of participation.
Your use of angst is well done. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of metaphor and simile. Your style is relaxed, but detailed and I appreciate that. When I noticed you published a new chapter, I literally gasped at my screen.
Over all excellent work. Thank you for taking the time to share your talents and creativity with us.
Cupnjava c[~]~~~ *sip*
Yes, this chapter had some technical errors. Such is life. We all have technical errors. It is very hard to proof and edit your own work. After all you know what you mean to say and you know what the scene looks like. It takeotheother, and another, and another, to be able to tell if the reader will see it as the author does. This is why professional writers get professional editors.
As fanfic writers we do try to presgoodgood quality work, but we write between school, work and home life. We’re worn out by the time we get to the PC and if someone wants to nit-pick let them.
I have really enjoyed this story. I felt you characterized all of them quite well, and the plot itself was quite good. I like how you kept the reader in the dark as much as Sanzo was, is and will be. You’re OC’s were well flushed out given their level of participation.
Your use of angst is well done. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of metaphor and simile. Your style is relaxed, but detailed and I appreciate that. When I noticed you published a new chapter, I literally gasped at my screen.
Over all excellent work. Thank you for taking the time to share your talents and creativity with us.
Cupnjava c[~]~~~ *sip*
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