rate_review Reviews

I really enjoyed this story, and I am rather glad you had a lemon to help disapate the sexual tension.

There is one thing to bring up, the formatting for this story is super fucked up and there are portions MISSING entirely!
For instance, it jumps between "keitaro walks toward Naru and Motoko" then we're in the middle of the lemon!
Please please please fix this, if you can.

This has been the closest to an actual story I've read on this site. Not once have I had to roll my eyes at some ridiculous smex situation. The whole thing plays out like it might have in the manga. Keitaro could stand to be a bit more hypertense, but that's just me. I'm defintely going to keep reading

Well done!!! I enjoyed your story from start to finish. Not to mention I was very pleased with the ending (I always rooted for Motoko). I rarely if ever give anyone a review but this deserved it! I tend to wander the web alot and I came across the Love Hina series on youTube a few days ago. It has been several months since I have been here at AFF and I decided to check out the anime section. I am glad I did. I actually lost my composure and cheered Keitaro's decision! (and me a grown man!!) I would love to see this story done in anime and I think it would work just as it is written. I will definaely be checking out your other work.

Arigato

excellent! im procrastinating on a essay, and i wanted to read something with a plot. however, most of the stuff on ffnet ive either read or is crap, and stuff here is mostly just sex. this was just what i needed.

"‘Promise. That word gets me into so much goddamn trouble! I’ll never promise anything again for as long as I live, even if I live to be 300!’ he silently vowed."

isnt a vow a type of promise? not sure if that was supposed to be humor, but according to your a/n, it wasnt.

this is not really a review but rather how i feel when i read this stories,wait is that a review?..but well i'm really grateful for the ending..i mean that'll be sad if he's with naru instead of motoko.all in all a happy ending i guess..i mean if he's with naru then it'll be sad for motoko after all she is his wife..i mean why'd the man had to go and break off his marriage when it's all clear to him who loves him the most..okay naru did love him but i just feel that motoko deserves him a little better..i thank you for the great story that you wrote..it is truly enjoyable to read..oh it really remind me of ayumi hamasaki's song jewel, don't know why maybe i was listening to the song while reading this story ahahaha...but truly if i had to choose a pair between motoko and naru it'll be motoko,but i wouldn't object if he decided to choose them both..well keep writing great story..ganbatte nee..

Great story :) Good written, absorbing. I\'m impressed, It could easily be a regular book :) I love it ^__^

Congrats Hakwer, I must say that thats got to be the best fan fiction I\'ve ever read. (However, there are a lot of typos but maby thats just this website. -_-;)

THAT, was fantastic!

You had me on edge the entire time with the plot, i ALWAYS wanted to know what would happen next. i\'ve just stayed up till 5 am reading this because you hooked me so well, the entire thing is full of love, sexual tension and confusion.

Fan-fucking-tastic! XD

Great work. you\'ve earned a fan today.

Your story looks great. I love the plot and how well its looking so far. Thanks a lot for writing it. (just finished ch.5)