rate_review Reviews

Damn good story!!! I want another one!!!!

Wonderfully written piece of work! Thanks the to excellent grammad chd choice of words, reading it was light and yablyable. I wish to see more of your work soon.

I always thought that a Keitaro love-fanfic would eventually end up with him with either Mutsumi or Naru, but this fanfic highlights Motoko very well.

Well written, I have to say. The style was nice, an informal way of png sng something so serious into the reader\'s hands. I myself am a Motoko fan, and I couldn\'t help but love the ending. I have one bit of criticism though. Although your story was well played from beginning to end, it was a bit too American in the quotes. They were effective, nonetheless, in bringing out the story, but may I suggest that something similar to quotes from Japanese history? I\'m merely suging ing it, don\'t hurt me. XD Anyways, it is a deliciously great story, the sad parts well written. The emotion could\'ve been played more, although it is definetaly enough to emphasize your point. If there is a sequel, I\'d be happy to pre-read it if I could. Anyways, enough with my blabbering. The time spent reading this was well worth it. Keep writing, you will be able to make some awsome fanf


~Ja Ne
~Ky

dis was an awesome story. its a shamed dat it ended. i say u make a sequel. *sigh* luved da story T.T js sad dat it ended T.T

great story.
I will borrow the Idea with the marriege.
but there will be a different story first.

funny hardly anybody thought about that idea.

oh yes, I would love to read some more from you. About love Hina/evangelion... I already thought about that too. there are slight problems but it could work out....

migi

a nice try.
well motoko is really good looking.
but poor kei between the two of them....

will it go on?

migi

well, love dis fic. is dis a wats da couple here. i hope he goes wif motoko. well, update soon.

You know what\'s funny? I haven\'t seen Love Hina or read any of it\'s mangas. The only clue to the world, the characters, and the way they interact together is from a dating sim on newgrounds.com. Despite some dicrepencies (In the game Mutsumi is obsessed with watermelons and Motoko smokes a LOT), it\'s pretty accurate. It\'s all really good, though I don\'t know who Kitsune and Sarah are. Is Kitsune Mitsune from the game?

Wonderful story! Please update soon.

this is an amazing story i couldnt pull away from it.....i love it