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You had more typos than a drunken sorority girl and your drive into any bit of plot was broken and shaking. Please.. Please! If you choose to write -any- more, go toool ool and learn how to blend one paragraph and idea into the next one. Your "A happens, so B happens, and omg! C happened with this guy whom we don't know and care nothing about gets involved!" formula of writing made me turn red -for- you. Johnny? No one cares about him until we see why we should care about his character! there's -nothing- there in your story about him, other than 'he's there! oo!' Lame.

This is terrible. Freshman year in high school never teaches a person anything. Just try to learn how to write from the greats you've already read from.
Hopefully, you've read from.

of course is gonna b great if i inspired you to get on here lol.....wonderful work, i\'m looking forward to the rest of it