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Please!!! UPDATE!!

was a good job on ur first time writing it and hope u update soon really like this story sad for naru though oh well she missed her chance :P

yo i just got done readin your fic and man your a good writer. but i have one thing to say. have more confdence in your self.

Love the story! Wish you could add some more to it...try if you can :P

great are you gonna write anymore? too bad you can\'t write in fanfic.net anymore.

I found your story to be very good and I really enjoyed it. You are quite eloquent for your first time at one of these stories. Please keep up the good work. I would enjoy reading more from you in the future. I must admitt you have done a much better job than I did on my first stories, and as I look back on them the only proper response is \"how could I ever write such dribble.\" LOL.

P.S. Always Have Fun ;-)

^_^ *claps in appreciation* Good job on the lemon! I read the notes where you said you felt nervous and concerned... no need! You\'re an awesome writer! You were able to incorporate all those \'details,\' plus the drama that you had wanted, and still manage to pull off a great fic (so far should it have another chapter and or sequel)! But... one thing about Keitaro\'s behavior did sorta make me giggle/cough. Being the odd individual that I am, I just felt the need to let you know, that during intercourse, even if the male removes his *ehem* before he climaxes, he can still get the female pregnant. Technically there is still enough sperm in the *pre-excitement(?)* fluids to actually perform conception. Yeah... just an interesting fact I felt you should know... *looks around and hears crickets chirp* I think I\'ll shut up now, but again, great story! Keep on writing! =D

That was probably one of the most well writen lemons I have read in a very long while. It was very serious unlike most lemons I have read. Most just use words and details that you would find in a bad porn or something close to it. Yours actually presented two people being in love. Oh and I like the little twist you threw in there, never saw that coming. All and all good job!!

What can I say A great affort and properly done . I enjoyed it as the focus is the relationships with the sex as an added piece that I do like. I also see at least Mutsumi and Kitsune to have a chance with Kei as well as a repentant Naru.

You\'ll have fun writing it and I think I and the rest will have fun reading it!

dennisud

lol; umm... yea; u wer\'nt kidding about that getting banned part. Nice chapter though; can\'t wait for 6.