rate_review Reviews

I found the comments interspersed in parenthesis a little distracting. Furthermore, you have foot note numbers throughout the fic that don't actually correspond to any foot notes. I know that it's the practice of a lot of authors to use Japanese words in their fics, but if you're going to do that, you should make sure that you're clear on their spelling and proper usage (ex. 'sukebe', not 'sukabee' which is roughly equivalent to 'hentai', so there's no need to use both). And 'wo ai ni' is actually Chinese, not Japanese, so I'm not clear why Japanese speakers would be saying it to each other.
I know this sounds like a negative review, but I did actually like your story. It would probably be improved by a good beta.

*sniffles* if you have an account on yahoo...please...i would be honored if you messaged me. i loved your story! you have just become my favorite Greenwood author! \\\\,,//^_^\\\\,,// please. if you ever write anymore Greenwood fics, im me as soon as you can, so that i may read them. ummm....do you do requests? is so...*blinks*...i have some i deas....if you messaged me, i would be happy to share them, if you dedicated the story to me...*sniffles and hugs, eyes shining*. please answer, whenever you get the chance...

.....*fans herself*........wow......that was a great story!^^.........was it a one-shot, or are you going to continue it?........do you think you can email me with the update if you do continue it?..........*holds out cookie*........here\'s a cookie for you if you do ^.~.........*hug*......Ja ne!

Twas very good ^^ I can\'t believe there is only one Here is Greenwood fic. You\'d think people would write more? Oh well.. I guess possibly they may since the first volume had been released in English not too long ago.

I only have a few complaints: I don\'t think the random few words here and there in Japanese is necessary, probably better without them so it won\'t be difficult to read for those who don\'t know Japanese, and it just doesn\'t make much sense why they are being said anyway; also there\'s quite a few spelling errors. Besides that, awesome!

You do realize that you have put numbers in your fic obviously meant to go with a glossary at the end, right? But you haven\'t written one. And, uh, one other thing...why exactly is Shinobu speaking ese?ese? I won\'t even touch the random Japanese inserted, but Shinobu\'s not even Chinese...

Wow,very sensual.Lol.I liked it.

Weeeeeee! *squeals* This was really good! It is do hart to find Koko wa Gwoodwood fanfics.
And even harter to find such well written ones. You did a great job, really.
Please contiue the good work. ^_^ Banzai!

:D Yum. :: Huggles fic. :: n_n